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Gated Moon |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Gated Moon When the wind caught up my glance to a three-quarter moon in wait its light lit something within as we traversed through that old farm gate... Quiet steps within the night (I recall them all so wonder spent) light rain takes the moon to go casting jewels in the morning light like diamonds on a rose I listen well to those if only to catch up moments that flag this heart, beseeching time in every beat, fall apart, fall apart, fall apart Yet I am small among the mighty how to capture my own thunder I wonder where is my steady true, within I wander until dawn takes me home again to daylight and to you... to you. To you. Oh, I would speak profane to call upon Him to speak your name, yet wait daily for your thunder in my blunder but still you calm the clouds… yet I would hear them thunder… for oh, the smell of a rose... Gates that open squeak along the path to seek meaning asking questions of the sky why my heart beats I wonder why --------- This is a duet with Sissie Sunshine |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
And a tremendous duet it is!!! You both write so beautifully in solo, but as a duet, it is as exquisite! Another to edge the shelves of my library! Encore! misce [This message has been edited by miscellanea (06-14-2006 09:45 AM).] |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
A duet that flows as one voice I must say. The wisdom of two excells. I love this. Great job by you both.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
A beautiful duet Martie and Karilea..you work so well together..the words like pearls on a beach..seemingly strewn but deliberately placed..thank you... Goldenrose. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Excellent prose...excellent enjoyed this pleasure to read....  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh my, this is beyond beautiful.. Your ink blends so well together, I have no idea who wrote what! Thank you and brava ladies! ~Hugs to you both~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Jess Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 243Washington |
To both of you, its beautiful~!"casting jewels in the morning light like diamonds on a rose" Exquisitely lovely |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Do you two realize that this makes an incredibly beautiful song? Yes it does, it does.  A little tweak to add the words below in as a chorus and presto! I loved it. (This my Willow would have loved.)I am small among the mighty how to capture my own thunder I wonder where is my steady true, within I wander until dawn takes me home again to daylight and to you...to you. To you. Here is what I saw by the way ...  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thank you, poet friends for your replies...and Sissie, for the pleasure of dueting with you again. Sharon, what a wonderful thought...the golden gate...perfect!! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
The two of you walk very well together! Brava! *hugs*....jo |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
~ WOW !! ~  |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
A very Beautiful poem song from two very beautiful ladies. :-) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Just lovely, lovely ladies~ Write the moon ... I swoon~ Love it !! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
VERY NICE!! JL |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thank you both for a wonderful read. Enjoyed! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
There is not much in the world that is finer than a moment of spilling a verse, only to see it taken up by a thoroughbred filly who picks it up, throws it on her back, and rides away with it. My willing part of this duet, poets, was simply to place the winning roses around her neck. For she came all the way home. No, Martie, never a better gift than casting magic into a duet with you. Let's do it again, soon, please. I'll bring the oats.  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You girls fooled me....I didn't know it was a dddddddoooooooooooet..........well done, a great blending |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Well, I do think that my heart stopped for a moment of blissful pause at the reading of your beautiful beautiful words. Yes, Please, Duet Again Soon! -Bob |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
yippeee! what a gorgeous duet, ladies! I'm putting this beauty into my treasure chest of favorites. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Oh yes! Exquisite, ladies. |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
I love the moon, and anything in the sky. If you hadn't mentioned it, Martie, I would never have known that this was a duet. You two write so well together! I hope someday you get the chance to live like you were dying.... |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Hope that you are listening to my thunderous applause. Loved this! Shenachie |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Well ladies, this just made me smile so big. Lovely dueting, so please do-it again soon.  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Well, thought I.....I'll just wait a couple of days until this beauty starts to fall, then bump it up for another ride....HAH! Now I'm startin' to think it's never going to fall! This is so good.....when two people blend so well, the reasons go far beyond mere talent in writing and a chance similariy of style. They have to be matched in thought and spirit, in ways that really count. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Martie & Sunshine...Duet or solo this is one thing for sure, beautiful poetry. It flows so smooth, the rhymes just in the right places and the subject of life and why we are here is most touching...Oh did I say I enjoyed this very very much? I did. Thanks for sharing ladies...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Exquisite, both of you, thank you. I kept reading it over and over to delight my senses - like a mood-painting that one can't take one's eyes off. - Owl |
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ChaoticHazeLight Member
since 2006-06-13
Posts 71California, U.S. |
"light rain takes the moon to go casting jewels in the morning light like diamonds on a rose I listen well to those" Inspiring and touching... -Haze |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you again, everyone. Dueting with Martie always provides a very special moment and a forever-style of memory. |
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Frank W. Torres Member
since 2006-06-10
Posts 133 |
Very Nice. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Awesome, dear Martie and Karilea! True poetry to enjoy! All my love. Margherita |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Ya had me from the title on  beautiful blending of verse and spirit... I loved the prayer like flow of this!! Well done girlies. "Life is not measured by the number of breaths we take ... |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
you two do it very well - Paul |
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