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icebox
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in the shadows

0 posted 2006-06-09 11:55 PM



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The breeze here is soft tonight;
do you feel it
where you sleep
in your processed air conditioned keep,
with your doting lover
and your bodyguards;
can you hope
to smell the deep restless living sea
gently teasing me
along this phosphorescent line of sand,
waves playing,
licking rhythmically at my thoughts
as easily as my feet find threads of steps
among the prizes and wet debris
strewn carelessly,
offerings to nobody,
catalysts to crack awareness
from raw energy
the Mother ocean gives to me;
can you feel it in your dreams;
can you still reach that far
that you remember me?

©2006 by icebox
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iliana
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1 posted 2006-06-10 12:16 PM


"offerings to nobody,
catalysts to crack awareness
from raw energy"

Hi, this is nobody....lol.  Seriously, Mr. C., this is one beautiful blue piece.   ....jo

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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USA
2 posted 2006-06-10 12:16 PM


"offerings to nobody,
catalysts to crack awareness
from raw energy"

Hi, this is nobody....lol.  Seriously, Mr. C., this is one beautiful blue piece.   ....jo

serenity blaze
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3 posted 2006-06-10 02:36 AM


I can.




Martie
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4 posted 2006-06-10 11:30 AM


icebox

"can you hope
to smell the deep restless living sea
gently teasing me"

Does it take two, or can it be enough that you hope?  

Magnus
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5 posted 2006-06-10 12:21 PM


A great write, so visual in my mind as I
read...and the feeling of the thoughts so
vivid and easily felt.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
6 posted 2006-06-10 12:24 PM


Fantastic write!
Wonderful use of imagery.
Hugs~Nancy

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain ~

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