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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
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West Coast

0 posted 2006-06-09 07:37 AM



you spoke of climate
in a rather lady like manner
but I hoped the wind would come
and undo your precautions

something about storms
and what they do to deserts
seems so erotic to my mind
and the subtle edges of mountains

just before the sky presses down
and holds them captive in clouds
like a lover's hands wanting more
and a lover's lips drinking dreams

from the shimmering shoulder of a rainbow


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2006-06-09 07:47 AM



mesmerizing ...

and memorable...



Thank you.

Martie
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2 posted 2006-06-09 09:53 AM


DS

Oh yes!!  Something about storms!

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
3 posted 2006-06-09 04:47 PM


let it rain
Cloud 9
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4 posted 2006-06-09 06:04 PM


awwww-some as always.
inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
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Ohio
5 posted 2006-06-09 07:07 PM


before the storm
the old oak
quivers like
a spinster
about to
get a good pounding

o darkman
the places you make
even a goodgirl go
*grin*

The Lady
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
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The Southwest
6 posted 2006-06-09 10:54 PM




Sigh... wizard. Only you could make a storm in the hot, dry desert. Make more please.


Honeybee
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Ontario, CANADA
7 posted 2006-06-09 10:56 PM



I LOVE everything about this - so sensual, elegant, enticing......It's a keeper~

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

Klassy Lassy
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since 2005-06-28
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Oregon
8 posted 2006-06-10 02:37 AM


"something about storms and what they do to deserts--"  even deserts bloom sometime, depending on the storm...
~ Klassy

kif kif
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since 2006-06-01
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9 posted 2006-06-10 02:08 PM


Hello Dark Stranger,

this reminds me of "The English Patient", one of my favourite, bitter-sweet books. The reference to the winds clinched it.

A melancholy, yet sensual rhythm to your poem heightens that-romantic, in the best sense of the word.

I really enjoyed this, thanks for the read.


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