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Robert Edward Levin
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since 2006-06-01
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can't remember. somewhere in midwest

0 posted 2006-06-05 06:40 AM


  Halcyon Eyes


We gathered silently
before the blue skin of dawn
stitched itself to the arms
of naked trees

warmed our bodies
with wool yarns and yellow fires,
the smoke lingering
like the scent of jasmine

ambled arm in arm
over emerald grasses
sleeping ‘neath the calm
of cotton seas

laced fingers together,
we quietly wept,
our halcyon eyes echoing
people and places far away
  

Robert Edward Levin
www.robertedwardlevin.com

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passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
1 posted 2006-06-05 06:45 AM


very descriptive! I like this
Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
2 posted 2006-06-05 12:24 PM


Very mystic in my opinion.

"laced fingers together,
we quietly wept,
our halcyon eyes echoing
people and places far away"

The contrast of weeping and halcyon eyes was disconcerting...

I was left with a deep feeling of sorrow for both of them.  

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

3 posted 2006-06-05 12:54 PM


I felt total peace, as if the couple were miraculously melded within harmony, weeping for those who were not, so far far away...like they were in total bliss in a world of their own...

wonderful!!!

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26
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The Southwest
4 posted 2006-06-06 12:37 PM



Oh, this is exquisite... the whole thing.

Robert Edward Levin
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since 2006-06-01
Posts 45
can't remember. somewhere in midwest
5 posted 2006-06-06 07:05 AM


Susan, Passing Shadows, LeeJ, Lady:

Thanks all for reading,  It's most appreciated.

LeeJ & The Lady:

wonderful and exquisite, I'll take those adjectives all day. Thank you both very much.

Robert Edward Levin
www.robertedwardlevin.com

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