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me_here New Member
since 2006-07-14
Posts 5Qld, Australia |
darkness encases me and my fears take possession of my soul i search but cant escape from their grasp they smother me squeeze the breath from my chest my eyes close and i surrender but her hand touches mine she reaches into the darkness and her fingers clasp me and pulls me into the light my lungs fill my heart starts and she rescues me her love breathes life into me jon 2006 |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Jon, Welcome to PiP. It's a beautiful place. Thank you for sharing your poem; it's beautiful. I hope to see more. aziza |
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ambivalence Junior Member
since 2006-07-13
Posts 15Canada |
That was very nice. Thank you Jon. |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
welcome to PiP, Jon  I look forward to seeing more of your work ~*Sheli*~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
welcome!!  I like this poem! Will be looking for more! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jon~ Welcome to the passionate pages of PiP~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
welcome to the passion |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Welcome to PIP and thank you for writing such a pretty poem. This wears Plenty of magic with emerald impulse. |
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deasomnians Member
since 2006-06-20
Posts 87California |
A very eloquent image. I look forward to more of your work! "Nature has implanted in our minds an insatiable longing to seek the truth" - CJCL Convention Theme 2005 |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
welcome to PiP, if I haven't said that on another thread already (i'm so scatterbrained) .. ****************** and she rescues me her love breathes life into me ****************** I adore these lines, I feel them. I have a "he" like this ... if he would just smarten up enough to realize it  ~*Sheli*~ By words the mind is winged |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions, Jon! Please, check your email for a Very Special PiP Greeting! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
A wonderful message in this posting as all it takes is the hand of one person to eliminate a huge barrier of fear for a fellow human being. Welcome to Passions by the way, hope you enjoy your stay.  gif by Twist |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS! I very much enjoyed your entrance post. Looking forward to reading more of your work. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ For it was not into my ear you whispered |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
Welcome to passions! And nice poem. Love and rescue are both beautiful things! Nice write, keep them coming! Kristabell "Use your imagination not to scare yourself to death but to inspire yourself to life." |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Welcome Jon. More please. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Sounds like a great touch .... Welcome Jon, hope to see lots more. Ct |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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me_here New Member
since 2006-07-14
Posts 5Qld, Australia |
Thank you all so much for your welcome and thoughts about my poem. All your comments have been very positive and very much appreciated so i will venture posting another lol....its titled 'her' |
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BeautifullyBroken84 Junior Member
since 2005-11-16
Posts 11Minnesota, USA |
I know the feeling of suffocation...it's overwhelming. I could sense that when I read your poem. Well written. ~* I write the waves of my emotions, with my pen as my ship and my heart as my compass *~ |
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