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The Shadow in Blue
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since 2006-05-18
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0 posted 2006-06-04 07:34 PM


Surprising Love
05/22/06
Jill S.

The warmth of your arms pulls me in
giving me the escape that I'd long sense forgotten
over my trials, over the years
But what caught me the most was the look in
your eyes
When you stared into mine and saw the true me

And what will surprise me evermore
was the smile in your eyes
that danced in the flames of the fire of my life
Just listening and waiting for your time to come
to pick up the pieces of my blemished life

It may seem so wierd that these two opposites attract
the pain and the love
eminating from each other
But you to me are my rock and my Savior

For it is in so many ways that you
reveal yourself
through your jabs and your quips
in the mystique of your heart
that you embrace my dark aura
in the face of my faults

So my friend, after all that's happened
through the good and bad
we stand tall on firm ground
I've taken the stands, and you the slaps
But at the end of the day
through the battles of friendship
you are my brother with a part of my heart



It's strange that words are so inadequate. Yet, like the asthmatic struggling for breath, so the lover must struggle for words.
T. S. Eliot

© Copyright 2006 Jill Slamka - All Rights Reserved
Tom Zart
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1 posted 2006-06-05 08:39 AM


Beautiful love poem I like it very much compose on my friend.
Bodger
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since 2005-06-12
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Tolerance for a short time
2 posted 2006-06-06 01:39 PM


I thought I could pick this up at the beginning but I think you were writing as you sat at the screen and did as we do at times, just started writing on an idea and then developed something but

Read it to yourself the next day

Dont throw it away as some of us do

Just re-read

Dave

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26
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3 posted 2006-06-06 04:12 PM



Excellent piece of work Jill.

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4 posted 2006-06-06 08:33 PM


I loved the way you wrote this.
It's beautiful.
Hugs,
Ethel

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