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Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

0 posted 2006-06-04 02:39 PM

Behind The Veil

Before you
there were others
just as confident, smug,
so sure they would understand.
But, I’m not so easily saved
made a slave
to your carnal manhood.

And if you only looked
you would have seen the truth
that you’re just another carbon copy
of all the ones before.
If only once you listened
to the breath behind the words
focusing on something more
rather than fantasizing me in something less
you would have claimed the best – my heart.

If only you saw past the wanton ways
you would have been within my skin,
but it’s a sin when a man who’s only a boy
wants the sex
and not the soul of a woman.

The glass slippers I wear for you have cracked
because you can’t seem to take your stare off my chest
or indulge in clever conversation
without your shallow banter.
Last I checked romance wasn’t a game of chance
with every second or third word you pick up
is changed to some sleazy innuendo in your favour.

Behind the veil
I let the real of me die
for a love that’s never real.
You only smell the scent of grass
and lick the tempting tongue
you only see the eager eyes
the come hither on the other side.

But, I’m just as much the fool.
I am fraudulent fervor in the search
and that’s why I give up.

Melissa Long-Monette

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

[This message has been edited by Honeybee (06-04-2006 06:15 PM).]

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2006-06-04 06:52 PM

wow
this fries

~to wait for one
who feels the heartbeat
not simply the heat~

shirtless
Member

since 2006-04-29

Posts 359

2 posted 2006-06-04 09:43 PM

an interesting series of contrasts:
     the words not the breath
     sex not the soul
     the boy not the man
     the body rather than the heart
And these contrasts lead the poet to see life as the disappointment, not the dream.
This poem is nicely unified by its thematic consistentcy.
Another good write, Melissa.

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shades of paul
Member

since 2005-12-14

Posts 370
In Reality

3 posted 2006-06-04 09:43 PM

Very nice poem, loved the title........paul

shades of peace,love,and happiness to you

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

4 posted 2006-06-05 03:03 AM

"If only once you listened
to the breath behind the words
focusing on something more
rather than fantasizing me in something less
you would have claimed the best – my heart."

Well done, Melissa!

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