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Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

0 posted 2006-06-02 10:20 PM

I met you in the Marina
on a whimsical summer day.
You stared at my eyes, tossed me a wink,
proceeded to tie my shoelaces together
then declared without so much as a blink
"I've got you now."

We played into the sunset,
two serendipitous souls
floating
on a summer night's amber sea
aboard the sloop Jolly JC.
My heart drifted far away
into the land of dreams
~infinity~
held itself within your eyes
under Vincent blue skies.

Before the month ended,
clouds from the Gods above
showered me in sweet harmony
with your undying Love song.
We played chess together,
checkmating each other
while laughing at life's absurdities.
And even when you later
broke my heart,
I whispered
"Thank you."

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

1 posted 2006-06-02 10:39 PM

Any one who enters your life space and brings a little joy should always be remembered with fond feelings. Best to you, martyjo

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2006-06-02 10:45 PM

martyjo, thank you for sharing that comment
what a beautiful philosophy

Ella Blue
Junior Member

since 2006-05-26

Posts 47

3 posted 2006-06-02 11:52 PM

"And even when you later
broke my heart,
I whispered
"Thank you."
I like this! I love that you allow your subject to raise above something as ordinary as a break up, by showing us her understanding of it. The broken heart; while painful as it may be, cannot surpass the joy that she had in the relationship. You get the feeling that she'd do it again even with foreknowledge.
PS. love the title also, it has a great rythm

D.Lester Young
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1219
Austin, Tx

4 posted 2006-06-03 12:47 PM

Your touch it is always that special. I enjoyed your poetic wordplay.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2006-06-03 01:09 PM

It's a little after noon
where I sit
and I didn't think
I would be finding tears
so quickly
this day.

A heartbreaker...

with understanding.

Well done, Kacy

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

6 posted 2006-06-03 01:36 PM

Midnitesun,

Tied the laces together and said, "I've got you now!" Oh, sometimes they tie those laces in knots! Nice knots, but knots no less. Take care. I enjoyed your poem very much.

misce

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2006-06-03 02:32 PM

Kacy~

And even when you later
broke my heart,
I whispered
"Thank you."

Oh ... I have been sooooooo there~

This is heart-tuggingly penned~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

XOx Uriah xOX
Senior Member

since 2006-02-11

Posts 1403
Virginia

8 posted 2006-06-03 02:43 PM

::smiles::

I may not always tell you...
But you always touch me.

:: bows ::

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