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Ratleader

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0 posted 2006-06-02 02:06 AM

wisp

It is
something like the
ripple
of a stranded mayfly’s
wing,
ten miles upstream,
moments before the
nova’s
forlorn little blast,
within
some far-red-shifted
nebula,
a thing that matters
to one fish,
searching
in some never stream
upon some never
planet,
and because I feel
such things
a billion years before
the shock front
will arrive,
to me.

It is a matter of
proportion;
some things that are
much nearer,
matter less.

Will Rhyme
Member

since 2006-05-22

Posts 149

1 posted 2006-06-02 02:10 AM

"It is a matter of
proportion;
some things that are
much nearer,
matter less."

I wholeheartly agree.....are you married?

if not, would you mind me reading this poem to my wife of 37 years?
Great JOB...keep writng and get Married soon!

Will

Ratleader

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2 posted 2006-06-02 02:22 AM

I am, but you've got me beat by a year so read on!

....and oh yes, she matters so much I can't put it into words, and fail miserably when I try.

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LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

3 posted 2006-06-02 07:01 AM

It is a matter of
proportion;
some things that are
much nearer,
matter less.

Whoa...such wisdom...and of great value...much love sent to both of you...as your both blessed.

P.S. Me thinks she knows how much you love her...

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2006-06-02 08:20 AM

dang! just wow

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2006-06-02 08:23 AM

RatMan~
Such a beautifully whispered wisp~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

latearrival
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since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

6 posted 2006-06-02 09:02 AM

Appreciating your wisdom, deep thoughts and talent to express it all. martyjo

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

7 posted 2006-06-02 09:33 AM

This is so true.

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

8 posted 2006-06-02 01:08 PM

Ed...Me thinks there is a ripple in you that touches many, now and years from now.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

9 posted 2006-06-02 01:13 PM

She knows...oh yes, she knows.
How lovely this wisp is.
Hugs~Nancy

~ Trace my body with your words,
in doing so, you touch my heart ~

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

10 posted 2006-06-02 02:33 PM

and because I feel
such things

And I'm so glad you do... for your perception and perspective enrich us immensely. *S*

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

11 posted 2006-06-02 03:23 PM

Oh, my goodness!  This little ripple hit me in the solar plexus!  My favourite part is all of it and my second favourite part is:

and because I feel
such things
a billion years before
the shock front
will arrive,
to me

The part about the stranded mayfly's wing
is just too shattering for me to allow that to be a favourite part - but it would have been if it weren't so shattering.

Please tell me what the nova is?  Is it referring to the mayfly or is it a boat or is it something else?

Magnficent microcosm poem.  My insides are still quivering.

- Owl

Ratleader

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12 posted 2006-06-02 04:17 PM

Well....when a star reaches the end of its life, the heat inside it isn't quite enough to keep it from collapsing....but when it does collapse, that falling-in makes a huge concentration of heat energy and concentrates its last remaining hydrogen, so that suddenly it overheats and explodes! The explosion is enough to vaporize any planets it has, and causes it to shine brighter (for a very brief time) than the whole galaxy it's in.

So ye poor fishy would be doomed indeed, before his last meal arrived.....

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The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

13 posted 2006-06-04 02:24 AM

Oh yes!

And these are the lines that
grabbed me and squeezed hard:

"a thing that matters
to one fish,
searching
in some never stream
upon some never
planet"

playing.with.crayons
Member

since 2006-01-02

Posts 362
Neverland

14 posted 2006-06-04 03:00 AM

and what a supernova this was indeed.
enjoyed this immensely.
cheye

Midnitesun

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Gaia

15 posted 2006-06-04 06:02 PM

Ed, what a great write!

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