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0 posted 2006-05-31 09:32 PM


on a crowded bus
I found myself
pressed
side to side
against Jesus

and as I stared
into the scar
of his smile
his blood clotted
into the weave
of my shirt

so that when we parted
at my stop
I heard
the whispering
rip
of old velcro

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1 posted 2006-05-31 09:48 PM


the way you write, leaves such a clear picture in the mind, that is too awesome
LeeJ
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2 posted 2006-06-01 10:17 AM


loved this, and also your website, especially the poem entitled, "The Valentine I Never Gave You", which to me is a great significance of understanding someone else, not to mention, a beautiful gift to someone...
Honeybee
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3 posted 2006-06-01 08:02 PM



Wow - the vivid pictures of life you paint are just so damn powerful....You write of dark & religious themes with such wisdom and raw expression - I especially loved the ending of this poem - what a visual!, powerful effect!
Is this a recent poem (from 2006?)?  'Cause I'm printing it out to add to my book

Melissa~

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Ella Blue
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4 posted 2006-06-01 08:19 PM


I just love that you had Him on a crowded bus with you
Beautiful.

Martie
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5 posted 2006-06-01 10:10 PM


A great metaphor...again such a real thing juxtaposed beside a spirit thing.  Love the contrast.
Robert Edward Levin
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6 posted 2006-06-02 07:14 AM


powerful.

R~

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