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ben_huckle
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since 2006-05-30

Posts 7

0 posted 2006-05-30 08:40 PM

Hello all, im new here and new to writing poetry, never written one before today, so any points would be great, its kinda about me and my girl breaking up and just some other random stuff about life really.

Why is my pain so great?
Why do I feel this pain of mine?
Should I feel like this?

I don’t know why I feel like this,
It only lasted for a while

My heart is broken,
But should it?

I cannot keep, busy forever,
I am going to have to face it,
But when?

She was like a bright pink flower in the morning sun
New, Different, Beautiful

Beauty is not like a dictionary definition,
It is shown in so many ways
It comes in so many forms
I can’t explain the love I found for her,
I thought I wouldn’t find love like that again

But now she’s gone,
She dropped me like a ton of bricks,
I’m left in this hemp….

And now I have these paths a head of me,
Which one should I choose?
Should I just sit on the sideline?
Or choose one now?

I can’t get these thoughts out of my head.
My head is one mess of thoughts,

And I hate my thoughts…..
But I just can’t get rid of these thoughts that control in my mind,

My life has repeated it’s self so many times before,
I’m I just going around on a small wheel
Which is my live?

Do I need to get off this wheel?

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2006-05-30 09:12 PM

Welcome to Pip!

I think this is great for being your first poem, I hope that you are encouraged to write more...this is a fantastic place and I think you will enjoy yourself here!

*please check your email for a special greeting.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2006-05-30 10:13 PM

good first poem!

Welcome to Passions...I know you'll love it here!

picturegramic
Member

since 2006-05-16

Posts 112

3 posted 2006-05-30 10:22 PM

Welcome to pip.

picturegramic :)

ben_huckle
New Member

since 2006-05-30

Posts 7

4 posted 2006-05-31 04:22 AM

thanks all for your warm welcome and thanks for the greeting card

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