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passing shadows
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Some Years Back


If I ever thought it would come to this
I'd have left it all behind
some years back, before
it left my heart and entered my mind.

I don't even try to say goodbye now,
I just wait to be able to breathe again-
there you are on the grievin' end
while I'm here on the leavin' end
with nothing worth believin' in.

You were like a piano
and I played on the black keys,
I suppose after so many songs
goodbyes come with certain ease
till they aren't even necessities.

The last song won't be finished.
I should have known it would come to this,
the years have gone, stolen things
so long forgotten, I don't even miss
some years back.

May 30, 2006



© Copyright 2006 Dixie Lee Bullington - All Rights Reserved
Goldenrose
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1 posted 2006-05-30 12:30 PM


A personal write..of a ghostly shadow following you..but you will let it fade and you will move forward..thank you for this poem..

Goldenrose.

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2 posted 2006-05-30 01:00 PM


DixieDoodleGal~

'the years have gone, stolen things'

Sometimes that is a good thing ... yes ?

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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3 posted 2006-05-30 01:11 PM


Excellent write Dixie gal..
shows you're moving on
and that is a good thing yes?
Hugs~Nancy

~ Trace my body with your words,
  in doing so, you touch my heart ~

latearrival
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4 posted 2006-05-30 03:37 PM


"The last song won't be finished.
I should have known it would come to this,"


The last song will never be finished but slowly played over and over, each time more softly and sweetly. You Are Loved.

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5 posted 2006-05-30 06:47 PM


Good one Dixie,  and I really like these
lines....
there you are on the grievin' end
while I'm here on the leavin' end
with nothing worth believin' in.

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6 posted 2006-05-30 07:03 PM



I leaned into the words,
knowing they are real...
knowing what hurt your past
and bruised your senses...

but that was yesterday,
and yesterday's gone...

Now, feel the pride
of coming so far ahead
of the game...

oh yes,
feel the too.





WindWalker
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7 posted 2006-05-30 09:45 PM


This was an excellent write! And the  imagery is very good too!!!!!!!!!!!!
picturegramic
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8 posted 2006-05-30 10:51 PM


I feel the love, or the use to be love in this. Sort of like the shadows of love!
Thanks for sharing.

picturegramic :)

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9 posted 2006-05-30 11:48 PM


Bittersweet memories....

~sky

I hope someday you get the chance to live like you were dying....
~Tim McGraw

iliana
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10 posted 2006-05-31 12:22 PM


playing on the black keys....liked that analogy, Dixie......*hugs*......jo
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11 posted 2006-05-31 12:38 PM


It's difficult, but then most worthwhile things are!  And you are doing it admirably!  Well done and we are all cheering on the sidelines!  Enjoyed your poem and your success!

- Owl

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12 posted 2006-05-31 01:53 AM


some times the answer is right there in the music

a poet who cares

Honeybunch
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13 posted 2006-05-31 03:19 AM


Yes, good write, Dixie, and I too like these words -

"there you are on the grievin' end
while I'm here on the leavin' end
with nothing worth believin' in."

But somewhere deep down we'll always find something to believe in - we have to.



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14 posted 2006-05-31 03:25 AM


I suppose after so many songs
goodbyes come with certain ease
till they aren't even necessities.


I guess it's a blessing that wounds heal as time passes.

Love
FNG

LeeJ
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15 posted 2006-05-31 07:13 AM


You were like a piano
and I played on the black keys,
I suppose after so many songs
goodbyes come with certain ease
till they aren't even necessities.

The last song won't be finished.
I should have known it would come to this,
the years have gone, stolen things
so long forgotten, I don't even miss
some years back.


Life is like that...yanno, what seemed so awful, not ages with time, as we do ourselves...this was a wonderful write...enjoy reading you...


passing shadows
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16 posted 2006-05-31 09:12 AM


Thanks everyone
I'm so glad you enjoyed this!

It's about time I got around to writing something new, yes?

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17 posted 2006-05-31 10:00 AM


Dear Dixie, from the height to which you have risen, you have gained insight and prospective ~ and it shows in your writing!



Linda
Flowers

linkin16
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18 posted 2006-05-31 11:28 AM



it suprises me the standard of writing here..another great read that hooked me from the start..my favourite type..could feel you from the start..good job

JL
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19 posted 2006-05-31 06:49 PM


"I should have known it would come to this,
the years have gone, stolen things
so long forgotten, I don't even miss
some years back."

So much reality in your writings.
This last line highlights that very well.

JL


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20 posted 2006-05-31 07:45 PM


Dear Dixie girl!! This is so well written!
I think it's my new favorite of yours....
for now! LOL

I especially loved this verse.....

"I don't even try to say goodbye now,
I just wait to be able to breathe again-
there you are on the grievin' end
while I'm here on the leavin' end
with nothing worth believin' in."

Hugs and love,
Ethel


passing shadows
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21 posted 2006-05-31 10:56 PM


I do love your replies so much
and I thank you each

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