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Islands And An Endless Sea
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Islands And An Endless Sea |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Your constructive comments are gifts to me. Islands And An Endless Sea From deep within, from that veiled twilight zone Which spans beyond the pendulum's arched sway And calendar days, mid the depths of clay Birthed this dream's mystic symbols all well known. I saw a calm blue sea (Its source a throne) And midst it, countless mini islands lay Beyond my sight. I looked this and that way And spied no boundaries except my own! And I knew the dream's meaning, clearly too, As I beheld this scene.Each island's why I knew: "each as an unique and special you!" All isles merged as one at depths 'neath the eye Of flesh and all bathed by the blessed blue Sea of grace, deeper than the highest sky! [This message has been edited by BROTHER JOHN (05-29-2006 12:16 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
BROTHER JOHN A pleasant deam. |
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Liz Sinclair Member
since 2006-05-06
Posts 93Atlantis |
One quick note...on the 2nd stanza, "And I knew the dream's meaning, clearly too, As I beheld this scene.Each island's why I knew: "each an unique and special you!" Is the last line suppose to read "each an" or "each as?" This reminded me a piece by the Zen Master, Gizan (1802-1878) Coming and going, life and death. A thousand villages, a million houses. Don't you get the point? Moon in the water, blossom in the sky. **Your piece had the same calmness and serenity about it....beautifully done. Sorry I was so long winded... Take care, Liz...Carpe Diem |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Liz, Thank you for reading this poem. When I have these kinds of dreams, I usually wake right up and have to deal with them. In most cases, these dreams have a certain "feeling" about them. Yes, there was a calmness that I can only express as transcendental. I hoped that some of this would come through in this poem. Thank you for pointing out a rough place. I was trying to keep ten beats in each line and yet I know it is not always possible. I am going to try to smooth this out in some way. If I cannot, I am going to use your wording. I am not familiar with this oriental writer. Thanks again for your comments and suggestion which I will take seriously. BJ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dear BROTHER, fortunate are they who have such visionary dreams and are able to recall them, learn from them, and have the ability to write about them so that they might share them with others.  Love & Light, EA  |
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Bodger Senior Member
since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260Tolerance for a short time |
Review it I always say I am puting down ideas Some of the major reasons' I write and respond to this site, is the quality and spirations of the people who write here If only I could get the UK to understand and know this Always read your words back to yourself if you are not writing them on line. Tell people Apart from your words If you are having problems with them People on this site Are Worth the Effort Dave |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sir... Dave said it so well. Myself, I see a linkage here to your world, any given poet's world... and this one, wherein we exchange our innate passion for the written word. Keep it up. Please. |
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Will Rhyme Member
since 2006-05-22
Posts 149 |
Enjoyed! Will |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Seymour, Thanks for reading this. Have a blessed evening. BJ |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Earth Angel, Your comments are alway welcomed. If I could just put my ideas down in picturesque as you. Your words shine and bring life. Have a blessed evening. BJ |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Bodger, Thanks for taking the time to write. Yes, my work is always under construction. My critics are gifts of grace to me. So I will not "knock" them. Have a blessed evening. BJ |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Sunshine, Thank you for your words. I am new at writing poetry. I realize the power of words and symbols and I only wish I could frame them as lovely as some do on PIP. Thank you. |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Will Rhyme, Thank you for your time and comment. Have a good evening. BJ |
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