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passing shadows
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0 posted 2006-05-25 04:33 AM



In North Dakota
you sit by your father's bed
he'll pass any day

ten years between us
I can't grieve for you at all
karma is the pits

© Copyright 2006 Dixie Lee Bullington - All Rights Reserved
Goldenrose
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1 posted 2006-05-25 05:34 AM


Raw words...feelings expressed..thank you..

Goldenrose.

''As the deer pants for steams of water, so my soul pants for you O God''
Psalm 42:1

inkedgoddess
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2 posted 2006-05-25 07:32 AM


karma?
what's it good for?

i figure mines already
decided,
i may as well
go down sinning

Gentle Spirit
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3 posted 2006-05-25 08:45 AM


perfectly titled Dixie.  Powerful expression.
Honeybunch
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4 posted 2006-05-25 08:57 AM


Sometimes one has to be heartless to protect the heart.  Yes, powerful words, Dixie.
Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2006-05-25 09:16 AM


passing  
And this too will pass. Good write.

Ericc
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6 posted 2006-05-25 11:37 AM


Excellent style for you Dixie...great write!

Eric

Earth Angel
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7 posted 2006-05-25 12:04 PM


I like karma! ~ the good kind!
But bad karma is indeed, "the pits"! Sadly I Can't



Linda
Flowers

passing shadows
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8 posted 2006-05-25 05:09 PM


thanks everyone


SmartChick
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9 posted 2006-05-25 09:50 PM


I understand.
Margherita
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10 posted 2006-05-27 02:31 PM


Yes, I agree with Honeybunch.

You are protecting your heart.

Impressive words.

Love and hugs.
Margherita

Honeybee
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11 posted 2006-05-27 06:06 PM


I, too, like Honeybunch's reply and agree...
This is a nice coupling of senryus as a poem, and the ending?! powerful! I, too believe in karma, but not in revenge, just in letting go and letting God handle it.

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

Angelheart
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12 posted 2006-05-27 06:10 PM


this was a very good senryu. nice to see you again, keep up the awesome poetry.

Poetry can get you very far
-Laura

poettothecars
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13 posted 2006-05-27 07:01 PM


given I don't even know what a senryu is
and at times more can be said
I did think of this,

In Florida
you hold to a heart
this small world

Together
hands across a net
food for thought

a poet who cares

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