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Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26
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Ontario, CANADA

0 posted 2006-05-23 09:18 PM




McDonald's Drive Through


I stared with hollow eyes
through the rear view mirror
at the couple in the car behind.
Time stood still the torture
as anger devoured my envy
for this gloating couple,
bleached blonde beauty at his side.

Emptiness growled my stomach sorrow
as I ordered four Big Macs
a milkshake and a large order of fries
though everyone knows how much I hate fries;
But surely their warmth will coax my cold
and the salt will bring me closer to heart failure
since I'm almost there anyway.

He kissed her, caressed her cheek and smiled
and I've never felt so alone
as I fought to hold back the tears
ashamed of how hardy I laughed
at the thought of putting my car into reverse
to smash their moment to pieces.

I bet he paints the sky with stars for her
and shines the moon mauve at her command.
I bet that she's a size two and can eat anything she wants.
Maybe I should change my order to a salad?
Too late. I need the comfort,
the pseudo-quasi happy denial
this survive one more day existence.

So tonight as skin sheds itself
I'll make love to the taste
then force the food down the toilet
and watch my insides swirl in shades of pain.

Ronald McDonald grins too damn much.
Maybe he'll let me borrow his mask?

Melissa Long-Monette


Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

© Copyright 2006 Melissa P. Long-Monette - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
1 posted 2006-05-23 09:22 PM


I have my memories of McDonalds

those last two lines are exactly what I've thought before

shirtless
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since 2006-04-29
Posts 359

2 posted 2006-05-23 09:27 PM


A tragedy with comic overtones and psychological  dissection worthy of big screen interpretation, and all in thirty-three lines.

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Rainbowdust
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since 2002-12-05
Posts 320
Sydney, Australia
3 posted 2006-05-24 06:04 AM


Ouch.. really felt this, Melissa. Very well written

The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears.

FNG
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since 2006-02-07
Posts 477

4 posted 2006-05-24 06:40 AM


just curious honeybee...

So tonight as skin sheds itself
I'll make love to the taste
then force the food down the toilet
and watch my insides swirl in shades of pain.

Wat does this imply?

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

5 posted 2006-05-24 06:42 AM


Too late. I need the comfort,
the pseudo-quasi happy denial
this survive one more day existence

A heart breaking story, I've known all to well...   

even though I high lighted 3 lines as my favorite, the entire poem from beginning to end was like reading the Da Vinci Code; guess cause I've been there and you took me back to a very sad time...
Very much enjoyed...

Hugs

playing.with.crayons
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since 2006-01-02
Posts 362
Neverland
6 posted 2006-05-24 08:50 AM


Oh wow. there's so much emotion in this poem, I got paper cuts turning these blue pages with you. A truly wonderful write.

farewell the ash-tray girl

Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
7 posted 2006-05-24 09:30 AM


Malissa...Raw emotion...put my happy memories of McD away for a bit.  Wishing you happier times!  
Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
8 posted 2006-05-24 10:30 AM


AWWW man this hurts...and yeah you just want to smack them all! It's hard to watch someone elses happiness when you are in pain. Like this a lot!!!
scyzoryk_o4
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since 2006-05-23
Posts 36
Canada and Poland
9 posted 2006-05-24 05:56 PM


The sting of jealousy can be overwhelming. However when it starts to creep into my mind I try to remember that every one has their own personal problems and I have northing to be jealous of for there are people that are so much worse of then me.
Powerful poem

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634
The Southwest
10 posted 2006-05-25 01:01 AM




Very well done!

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