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When Midnight Screams
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When Midnight Screams |
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Robert Edward Levin Junior Member
since 2006-06-01
Posts 45can't remember. somewhere in midwest |
When Midnight Screams When midnight screams like a diamond in the bright sun your face glows never mind the halo of blue darkness the streets live wild yet they remain as empty as the late night hour and televisions keep blaring away while the neighbors pray to their dreams so I walk the city streets blind because the lights have burned out like the vision in my soul a staggering mess But I can feel the touch of your spirit it breathes on me like a warm breeze I’m guided onward I’m filled with the steel of bone Still, sad as I may be glorious as I may want to be I pretend to hear laughter I pretend to walk by your side our fingers twisted together clutching, grabbing, holding on then I look but find the street still empty no place to hide from the rain just another long walk home with dawn to greet me on my doorstep while the neighbors’ televisions still blare away… dreams unanswered www.robertedwardlevin.com |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Robert So emotive...the scene well painted the mood of sad and missing. My favorite: "But I can feel the touch of your spirit it breathes on me like a warm breeze I’m guided onward I’m filled with the steel of bone" because it offers hope. I don't think I've said welcome to Passions...I do now! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very vivid piece I will look forward to more from you welcome! |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hello Robert, and welcome to Passions In Poetry. Your poem touched my heart. I really enjoyed reading it. I especially liked this part.... "But I can feel the touch of your spirit it breathes on me like a warm breeze I’m guided onward I’m filled with the steel of bone Still, sad as I may be glorious as I may want to be I pretend to hear laughter I pretend to walk by your side our fingers twisted together clutching, grabbing, holding on" Hugs, Ethel  Ethel's Love Poetry My Happy In Love Poetry Site Ethel's Heart Poems My SpiritIsUp Poetry Shelf |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
oh, the ache of being caught inside darkness, wanting to grab a moment of light and this write, aches...so beautifully. I love the midnight moments, when I am seemingly trapped in darkness; for in them, I appreciate the seconds of light that warms face and soul. The stark dark/light contrast brings me to an emotional peak that 'grey toned' moments just can't. LOL, hope that makes sense. |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Sigh. I felt the loneliness to be very real here in your poem. Very descriptive and well written. -Bob |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I've had a few...so I make new ones...not that simple, but effective...James |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
A raw, vivid and scathing write - This hurt to read, as I do relate... Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Liz Sinclair Member
since 2006-05-06
Posts 93Atlantis |
Well Robert, you know what I think. Your words make me melt. (bad baby, bad baby) hehehe...Keep them coming. ~L
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Robert Edward Levin Junior Member
since 2006-06-01
Posts 45can't remember. somewhere in midwest |
Thanks to everyone who took the time to read this piece. I appreciate your efforts and kind words very much. And thank you for the warm welcome, as well. REL~ |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
 I see you have been well received! As you should be...loved: "a staggering mess" There have been times... I look forward to much more from you! and welcome to Pip! "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
There are times when the art of pretending allows for a certain reality to soon take place... if you dream it... it will be. Enjoyed, Robert. |
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kif kif Member
since 2006-06-01
Posts 439BCN |
"Screams like a diamond in the bright sun" Hello Robert, this is very poetic, and packed full of imagary. I love walking my dog at night, looking into windows that are reflective during the day. I can see why you used this scenario to express the frustration that is evident in this piece...city living is crowded, but lonely, especially at night. Also, I'm admiring the clever little social comment you put into your poem, about t.v. A dark work, indeed. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I have written this mood...the city mood many times...and you have done well. |
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Robert Edward Levin Junior Member
since 2006-06-01
Posts 45can't remember. somewhere in midwest |
Susan: Thanks for the read, and the welcome. I look forward to reading more of your work, as well. Robert Edward Levin |
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Robert Edward Levin Junior Member
since 2006-06-01
Posts 45can't remember. somewhere in midwest |
Sunshine, Kif Kif & Magnus: Thank you all very much. I'm glad you all took from the poem what I attempted to give it. Regards Robert Edward Levin |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"I pretend to hear laughter I pretend to walk by your side our fingers twisted together clutching, grabbing, holding on then I look but find the street still empty no place to hide from the rain just another long walk home with dawn to greet me on my doorstep while the neighbors’ televisions still blare away" Magnificent Robert! Reminds me vaguely of Jackson Browne's "The Pretender." "true love could have been a contender" |
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Robert Edward Levin Junior Member
since 2006-06-01
Posts 45can't remember. somewhere in midwest |
The Lady: You're too kind. Thank you. Robert Edward Levin |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
so I walk the city streets blind because the lights have burned out like the vision in my soul a staggering mess loved this... but wanted to say the only difference was for me, I was driving the streets instead of walking them ( too dangerous for a woman to walk late at night) |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Dreams....so often they are illusive, and I wonder how much they are a form of prayer. This touched me sadly. So many of us understand this feeling of waiting in the dark for that golden glow of sun. ~ Klassy |
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Robert Edward Levin Junior Member
since 2006-06-01
Posts 45can't remember. somewhere in midwest |
nakdthoughts, klassy: thank you both very much for reading and responding. Robert Edward Levin |
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