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shirtless
Member

since 2006-04-29

Posts 359

0 posted 2006-05-20 06:07 PM

LAMENT

beneath the muscle of moon
we lay on the beach
and moved there
like we were the tide

and the sand it mixed in
with your goosebumps of skin
and the stars
combed their hair in your eyes

and the waves were like wax
but our footprints they vanished
like tracks
that jets leave in the sky

we’re a week from the moon
years from the stars
oh
that the past
could be part
of the sky
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[This message has been edited by shirtless (05-21-2006 10:34 PM).]

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2006-05-20 06:26 PM

I'm KEEPING this one...

SO romantic!

beautiful beautiful beautiful!

‘I want to swim away
but don’t know how
sometimes it feels
just like I’m falling
in the ocean’
~Blue October

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

2 posted 2006-05-20 06:27 PM

"beneath the muscle of moon
we lay on the beach
and moved there
like we were the tide

and the sand it mixed in
with your goosebumps of skin
and the stars
combed their hair in your eyes

and the waves were like wax
but our footprints they vanished
like tracks
that jets leave in the sky"
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LOVE, love, LOVE the imagery and passion in the above lines! It's a beautiful, romanticized lament.
Ok, I now officially have a favourite of yours - this one is being saved in my library. When did you write this? Is it an oldie or new? When I sometimes save poems, I also like to write down the year penned for nostalgic reasons.

This type of emote/lament is right up my alley - combining both the light and subtle darkness of poetry in one poem.
Excellent imagery and tone,laced with love and longing for the past, to regain something more..

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2006-05-20 06:31 PM

superb imagery
I love the way you toss sparkling stars about,
scoop warm sand in your hand
then sprinkle it all
before our eyes

shirtless
Member

since 2006-04-29

Posts 359

4 posted 2006-05-20 06:34 PM

It is satisfying when a poem pleases -- so thanks SEA and HONEYBEE.
HONEYBEE, this was written sometime before 1999.

shirtless
Member

since 2006-04-29

Posts 359

5 posted 2006-05-20 06:35 PM

and thanks MIDNITESUN.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

6 posted 2006-05-20 08:54 PM

and the stars
combed their hair in your eyes

Gorgeous!

Love,
Margherita

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

7 posted 2006-05-21 02:10 AM

It is (part of the sky) - and I know. Thank you for every brushstroke and the completed, living work.

- Owl

FNG
Member

since 2006-02-07

Posts 477

8 posted 2006-05-26 06:07 AM

and the sand it mixed in
with your goosebumps of skin
and the stars
combed their hair in your eyes

and the waves were like wax
but our footprints they vanished
like tracks
that jets leave in the sky

Very nice

Greatly enjoyed. How did you ever think of such imagery...

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