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Bodger
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since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260
Tolerance for a short time

0 posted 2006-05-20 02:50 PM


Thank you Greeneyes in all your faces on the site

Dave

Fingers danced watching steam

On a journey reaching within yourself

Riding a ticket you never purchased

And then I dreamed

I was asleeping by my shack
Head over heels I was leaning back
Listening to a man telling me
I had no place for where I be
Sun was low over me that day
Sun was high and he had that day
Didn't do his brain away
Man was talking cotton
Wool flustered brain
Sweat trickling on the beat
Of his summer rain

And I sang
Man
I am sitting sweet
Ain't no way I getting heat
You have no place to go
I am here and singing low
Up my beat to my song
I am here
You won't be long
Cause I am honest don't you see
You are intelligent not me
So take your time
Tell me more
Cause you are the man
I'm working for

Don't know why he went away
Suppose he felt he couldn't stay
I never heard him complain at all
Not that I can recall
So I sit in my shack
And just think
And relax

Till the tax

Come back

Dave

© Copyright 2006 Dave Page - Cirencester UK - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2006-05-20 07:35 PM


Captivating rhythm and visuals, dear Dave.
Love,
Margherita

froggy
Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893
Michigan
2 posted 2006-05-20 07:52 PM


Your words amaze me Dave, I make me think.
Enjoyed the read.

:-)

Until he extends the circle of his compassion to all living things,
man will not himself find peace."

Albert Schweitzer,
Nobel Peace Prize Wi

Bodger
Senior Member
since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260
Tolerance for a short time
3 posted 2006-05-21 10:14 PM


Margherita

Captivating rhythm and visuals, dear Dave.
Love,
Margherita  

Someone once criticised someone else

The guy said 'Why are you criticising me' and not him

The guy said 'he doesn't know any better'

and maybe that was the start of trying to learn

I thank you for your words, and I hope the words I write do for others, as this guy did for me - which was to learn.

dave

froggy

Your words amaze me Dave, I make me think.
Enjoyed the read.

Froggy

Can you just learn to let the essence of your words encapture..

I get so much stick for writing words that you would think I had done nothing for the last 40 years.

I was 8 and trying to learn how to spell, knowing words became a delight a lot of years later.

No-one in words or mathematics should ever be denied or attacked

We all danced to a different 'minstrel' and that pleasure, can not be bought, by anyone

Dave

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