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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2006-05-20 11:49 AM

Was past midnight
on flyday,

keys and strings
still breezing
at the bar,

while those
that lingered,
sipped the
bottom
of their straws,

and me and him
sat roadside,

in the respite
of his honda

was there i told him

between the bites
of conversation
and his wilting
bag of peanuts

was there i told him,
in lieu of
what my loins
held inward,

my heart
would now release
in rhyming color

bursting out,
in accepella,
in the sacred hours
before the dawn,

of how i had adored him

and all the stuff
that makes him,

makes the stuff
in me

GO GAGA

and in the moments
followed,

as i'm thinking
sipping java,

sitting solo,

knowing all
that left my lips
had now been
kissed upon
the stars,

without regards
to should or should nots,

for he was rendered
speechless, cept for
' have another peanut'

so bless the farmers
and the markets

and the intervention
of the peanuts

and whatever
constellations
may now be forming

from the gift
of faith
i offered,

in my plea
upon the stars.

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (05-21-2006 08:56 AM).]

Goldenrose
Member Elite

since 2003-05-30

Posts 3665

1 posted 2006-05-20 12:03 PM

Adoration from words written with style..enjoyed the sheer love behind the words..waiting in the wings for it's grand entrance...thank you..

Goldenrose.

''As the deer pants for steams of water, so my soul pants for you O God''
Psalm 42:1

Bodger
Senior Member

since 2005-06-12

Posts 1260
Tolerance for a short time

2 posted 2006-05-20 12:05 PM

Yes and some more please

dave

picturegramic
Member

since 2006-05-16

Posts 112

3 posted 2006-05-20 12:09 PM

inkedgoddess
an appropriate nick. I enjoyed the short
lines with much meaning. This was bitter
sweet to me.
enjoyed,
picturegramic

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2006-05-20 01:19 PM

Mish...absolutely one of your best!!
So many fantastic lines in this, just downright incredible..

you fly m'friend....High enough to reach those stars.

seek the flame within yourself
and let your soul be cleansed by
the fire of love. Axel Ekenstierna

XOx Uriah xOX
Senior Member

since 2006-02-11

Posts 1403
Virginia

5 posted 2006-05-20 05:32 PM

OMG  Yes !
Fantastic!
Incredible!
Amazing !
Spectacular!
__________ <---Apply adjective here

OMG !

:: bows ::

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

6 posted 2006-05-20 06:03 PM

Oh I love this, exquisite writing here - and I echo Uriah's exuberant words!

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

7 posted 2006-05-20 07:54 PM

quote:
and whatever
constellations
may now be forming

from the gift
of faith
i offered,

in my plea
upon the stars.

How exquisite, you have reached for the stars and they let you use their finest stardust to write your poem.

Love and hugs.
Margherita

Jack Straw
Member

since 2006-03-02

Posts 70

8 posted 2006-05-20 08:20 PM

great.

the last few lines hit hard as they should

[This message has been edited by Jack Straw (05-21-2006 10:47 AM).]

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

9 posted 2006-05-20 08:28 PM

girl, you rock
I'm keepin this
roadsided hondas
will never look the same now

bklynboy
Senior Member

since 2002-12-15

Posts 660
florida

10 posted 2006-05-20 10:11 PM

guess I gotta read between the lines.

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

11 posted 2006-05-21 03:54 PM

wow..you have rendered me speechless

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

12 posted 2006-05-21 04:08 PM

another awesome one

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