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themute
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since 2006-05-08
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0 posted 2006-05-20 11:09 AM



I have not yet written of the sunsets
But I have compared them to you my love
So now I will record for the suns rest
It shines harsh for many hours above  
Yet for a few moments it stays tender
Such splendor in color and lights warm grace
A beauty that’s so that words can’t render
Its draw grows greater the clouds are so placed
In my dreams I have seen us together
Watching the light as it’s fading away
We know that its night stars fill the weather
Yet still we watch for the sun comes again
So there are sunsets setting all places  
So raise the sun to warmthen our faces  


© Copyright 2006 Matthew Patrick Holbert - All Rights Reserved
Bodger
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since 2005-06-12
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Tolerance for a short time
1 posted 2006-05-20 11:18 AM


Based on Wordsworth I think.

A deep underlying observation of the reality of living with someone when love may not always be there, if I guess correctly.

Makes you thoughtful, but if someone doesn't have that ability, you might need to rewrite it, in blinding light.

dave

themute
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2 posted 2006-05-20 11:25 AM


actually i dont know who/what wordsworth is :/


ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
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3 posted 2006-05-20 12:48 PM


I read this as a quiet moment, shared between space and time...between two people...the endless rise and fall of a sigh.
Have enjoyed the emotions of your muse.
TD

Jack Straw
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since 2006-03-02
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4 posted 2006-05-20 03:19 PM


I enjoyed this...

and themute you need to check Wordsworth out...  this site is nice:
http://www.bartleby.com/145/wordchrono.html

check these poems out:
It is a beateous evening, calm and free

I wandered lonely as a cloud

The world is too much with us; late and soon

check out some other Romantics as well.

I enjoyed you sonnet though, mute.

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