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The world isn't flat
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The world isn't flat |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa 
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The world isn’t flat; that is a fact but it still has a jagged edge harsh and leering and tauntingly bad for endeavours at balancing on spikes of magnetized wishes and indents of magnified needs. The chasm below shrouded and grey waits like the fangs of a growling dog prepared and ready to rip to shreds the intense and undeniable will of a woman’s mind. And so balances love’s enduring beliefs on the edge of a mental disease bending and leaning, stretching, into the echo of feel until fear of the void below hastens retreat and surrender back to the fangs of normality in the mouth of different dog. And a hush falls over the earth to allow for the leveling out of deep indents and oversized spikes but the dogs still growl above and below intrinsic wishes and needs. Listen and know flat level ground is no testimony to the soul that seeks all the highs and lows of a life too soon blown away! Helen / 16 May 2006 |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Helen "Listen and know flat level ground is no testimony to the soul that seeks all the highs and lows of a life too soon blown away!" Great ending to a complex poem!  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
yes, to soon blown away... I sense in this a confidence of just knowing, without all the answers... wonderful penning |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Outstanding Honeybunch! you get better at climbing, walking, and muzzling dogs as time goes on. Enjoyed your perspective! :-) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Honeybunch LOL you have oppened Pandora's box And out flew the paradox. Enjoyed |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Helen, some days it pays to keep steel toed boots on... hope for the rare moment when a flimsy flipflopping sandal will be enough to tread over whatever lands in the pathway. There are days I wish the world were flat, that I could push a truckload of human junk over the edge into a final no-man's land. LOL I love to read your complex poetry! [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (05-17-2006 12:59 PM).] |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thanks Martie and LeeJ - your comments are greatly appreciated - I am trying to be ... less complicated.  |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Steven, Seymour, and Midnitesun - thank you. I thoroughly enjoyed all your comments and I can, you know, actually laugh at myself or rather at my brain that seems to work in a peculiar way. And wouldn't it be great if we could push all the human junk over the edge and end up with a clean world. Something to dream about! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Outstanding poem Helen and the first two lines grabbed me hard! I love these lines too: "but the dogs still growl above and below intrinsic wishes and needs." |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
The Lady - thanks very much! Glad you enjoyed. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes those first two lines are grabbing! Love the write! |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thank you, Dixie - glad you did. |
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