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bubblesleave
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0 posted 2006-05-12 11:21 PM



Bend me
twist me
spin me around.

Put me on the corner shelf,
with, other,   things you've found.

Shine me
wrap me
give me away.

My heart is plastic.
My mind is clay.

Caress me
love me
I'm here for your needs.

You can never destroy me,
I'm guaranteed!

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Archea
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1 posted 2006-05-13 03:49 AM


whoa, i liked the rythm of it.
Susan Caldwell
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2 posted 2006-05-13 08:55 AM


The flow was perfect..

and the message was clear if not a bit sad.

I liked this one.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2006-05-13 08:59 AM


bubblesleave,
Unbelievable but well done.

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4 posted 2006-05-13 12:08 PM


Now that was original and very, very good!  Great message to anyone in this poem.  No one can do anything to you that you don't allow them to do!
Gentle Spirit
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5 posted 2006-05-13 06:45 PM


Much enjoyed the rhythmic rhyme in this,
it flows nicely. Well done.

bubblesleave
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6 posted 2006-05-13 09:50 PM


Thank You ALL SO MUCH!

"smiling"

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