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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2006-05-12 10:45 AM


Blowing bubbles that are sticking
to my skin, I suck them in, again,
and breathe a little deeper then
when oxygen deprivation seemed like
such a good idea, you are speaking

and I'm not hearing what you say.

There was, somewhere in this world
a girl who held your hand and smiled
as she spoke the things that you preferred
to choke on while we danced in words,
forgetting that these things, well,

they have meaning.

And it is a possibility that you
have just forgotten me, in all the
commotion associated with growing up.

© Copyright 2006 Allysa - All Rights Reserved
Susan Caldwell
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1 posted 2006-05-12 12:09 PM




I love everything you write.

and I think they may be dealing with other stuff associated with living, but you could never be forgotten, I am sure of it.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Allysa
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In an upside-down garden
2 posted 2006-05-12 01:39 PM


You make me smile.
Thank you for your kind words.

I just write, well, whatever pops into my head.

Bodger
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Tolerance for a short time
3 posted 2006-05-12 04:23 PM


The nice thing about this site, is that it should be compulsory readying for any man.

Or maybe not.

There is always the dream that if we understand each other better, we will get along, until the clockwork figures dancing together get slightly out of synch, and the UK Prime Minister takes an extended holiday on George Bush's ranch for a number of years, billed to the UK of course

dave

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Gaia
4 posted 2006-05-12 04:51 PM


enjoyed this bubble blowing moment
I like the way
you breathed these thoughts
free

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2006-05-12 04:59 PM


I have a lot of catching up to do...I love your work, and have got you on my A list to read--for amazing!
OwlSA
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6 posted 2006-05-13 03:36 AM


I love the way you have with words.  You are all the richer for your thoughts and emotions - but you must know that already.  If he has forgotten you, he is the poorer for it - but then, perhaps he hasn't . . .

- Owl

Archea
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7 posted 2006-05-13 04:11 AM


wow, really good.
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