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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2006-05-10 03:59 AM


"ah..." but she is very sweet
and oh but you should fetch yer bone
jaws
is dancing down the street--
deh-deh-deh-deh-deh
d-dove...

down canal st. internet
it wasn't very hard to do
a vee that wasn't me and this
is all the shark that had lips left--it's
CNN
and pray-for-us
madonna's hands
are clasped in trust
"get that shot"
the renegade
reporter
drinking gatorade
(but cut the camera please)
and then

someone's loved one

drifted by

swollen

and I asked the "why"

of what was never questioned by

the talking heads

as we all died

drifting stiff like wood

until

you tried to grasp the arm of "it"
Uncle Henry's skin was silk--

slipping off the bone.

Karen's mind massaging this--
y'think that I'll get over this?


wrinkling

a jug of bliss

roly-poly

down the bone

and ulna

and the femur broke--

rotten

scarf the times of the,

the fits

and nothing was like this:

like children chawing marrow-bone:

but Uncle Henry's skin slipped silk

and news directors yelled the cut:

too graphic

they had cried "enough"

watching waters

in congeal...

they flashed

to the commercial break

and spoke of vitamins.

© Copyright 2006 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
LeeJ
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1 posted 2006-05-10 06:56 AM




there is hope and hope orchastrates one heck of a antiseptic...
Karen....your an incredible woman...keep on writing...always...

All my love

Susan Caldwell
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2 posted 2006-05-10 11:32 AM


over?

I don't think so.

it's soaked in.

and that is a tragedy..

and what is worse is there are things that could be done to ease some of what life has become...yet, very little is being done because they turn the camera's away.  

It's too much for us to watch, yet, how many are living it?



love you.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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3 posted 2006-05-10 11:34 AM


I'd like to have this served to the powers that be and the media moguls
alongside a huge bowl of wheaties

talk about a breakfast of 'champions'....

only you, serenity blaze, could write such a vivid truth, and with such intensity of emotion
and only your wording could entice me to return for a second reading

oh my, but this hurts to the bone....
I wish it were a Stephen King fantasy.

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4 posted 2006-05-10 12:07 PM


and I asked the "why"

of what was never questioned by

the talking heads

as we all died

drifting stiff like wood

until


It is that word, "until" that has to provide the hope K, it has to.  This truly ached with each word.

latearrival
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5 posted 2006-05-10 04:02 PM


All I can do is repeat what I have said to you privately. Publish!!  where all can read and learn from you ... martyjo
iliana
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6 posted 2006-05-10 04:55 PM


How can anyone possibly understand what you feel unless they experience this horror -- the cameras must be left to run!!!  You know my thoughts on this (and it's a fine piece of writing,too....really conveys well).  Wheaties, indeed (shaking my head) .....jo
Paul Wilson
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7 posted 2006-05-11 03:23 PM


Karen...Sights and memories we will never forget but hopefully we can heal and pray us and our children will never have to see again...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

sandgrain
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8 posted 2006-05-11 03:51 PM


Oh, Karen, you give depth to the media facade, a panorama to the snapshots, smells and climate to the TV views.

I see, pray and go on with life.  You live, eat and breathe it.

I love you for your courage, your honesty, your willingness to share from your horrible perspective the emotions you are experiencing. Please keep helping us 'feel' this aftermath.

God bless you

   Rae

serenity blaze
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9 posted 2006-05-11 07:13 PM


I need to thank you all yet again. I think I'm finally coming to terms with the fact that my head is screwed up. I think I should change my name to Queen of Denial.

But after a few thunderstorms here, and my family and I had some rough moments during them, and then we all had nightmares that we thought we'd been done with, we all realized that we will never forget, and never look at a raincloud the same way again.

I've been reading up on trauma and the mind is an incredible machine...it works things out on its own schedule, and things that happen during initial trauma become triggers, and we don't even realize it.

But thank you all for your kindness--it kind of balances out my life. I don't mean to dwell on this, or wallow--I just never know when that movie that runs in my mind will "show"...and I wrote this after looking in my pantry and wondering if "normal" people worry about stocking up on survival supplies. (Do they?)

I love you all bunches.


The Lady
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10 posted 2006-05-11 11:11 PM




"Karen's mind massaging this--
y'think that I'll get over this?"


Oh Karen. How can you ever get over this? Keep writing it. It needs you. This one almost drowned my heart.


bubblesleave
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11 posted 2006-05-12 11:42 PM


Another cleaver, and quite wonderful read!

Listen,

I DO appreciate you commenting on my poetry even when "some" seeem to think I have the Bird Flu...or worse.

Thanks,
and THANKS AGAIN!!!

in my mind,

You are a "most" decent human being!

Best to you,


Bubbles (Sharon)


Archea
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12 posted 2006-05-13 05:41 AM


i liked the flow of it and the words you used.  it kind of gave me and uneasy feel to though.  it opened my perspective of reality... interesting.
Allysa
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13 posted 2006-05-13 10:23 AM


I've read this at least ten times, I'm shocked I haven't left a comment yet. I think it's because you leave me so speechless, I cannot think of anything to say.

In Ohio, during "tornado season", people, especially in certain counties, stock up on supplies. Just In Case.


serenity blaze
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14 posted 2006-05-15 06:56 AM


Then we need some "just in case" poetry, eh?



I'll be around, unless of course, the teeny tidy tornadoes hit my pantry.

sigh

I worry about everything now...sigh

thanks for reading

and love to all

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