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Open Poetry #37

Behind the walls of...

BirdeeB
Member

since 2000-09-16

Posts 106
USA

0 posted 2006-05-09 08:20 PM

Hide

behind your twisted reality

Escape

I see you hide behind your

eyes, can you come out

to play?

Ignore

them let me whisper

in your conscience

Feel

nothing as you play

with that supposed reality

Worlds

apart I

Feel you cry out

Fanta(size)

run to that castle in the sky

Escape

into your reality

See

the lies float above you

Head

in the direction

of the pain

Run

run as fast as you can

Escape....

Bodger
Senior Member

since 2005-06-12

Posts 1260
Tolerance for a short time

1 posted 2006-05-09 08:44 PM

I'm not sure about the Fanta

Spacing fine

Direction fine

But can I suggest

The image is good

Delivery of content

dave

Debo
Member

since 2006-04-18

Posts 321
Texas U.S.A.

2 posted 2006-05-10 10:46 PM

I though this was well written
I liked this escape...

Debo

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