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Four Letter Lie
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Four Letter Lie |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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Four Letter Lie I am doll parts, limbs silken skin desire, disgruntled and stitch-witchery smile; A searcher of touch, tender and things unobtainable. I am the blind kiss fool begging a happy ending from prince impending frog. I sacrifice myself for what I know is false. Don't ride a white horse it is deceiving there is no purity only lies and when the paint dries there is black and the prince has a mistress in every kingdom. Love, why do I invest all these years yearning for a four letter lie? I am stone on broken bone hope has no welcome here. Melissa Long-Monette Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Katerie Member
since 2006-01-27
Posts 92Central New York |
Don't ride a white horse it is deceiving there is no purity only lies and when the paint dries there is black and the prince has a mistress in every kingdom. How incredibly true-- Amazing write. |
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Liz Sinclair Member
since 2006-05-06
Posts 93Atlantis |
I loved this piece! The body, in whole, has this abstract quality...superb. Of course, the topic, (touche'). Thanks for sharing. ~Liz...Carpe Diem |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Thank you both for your positive feedback....It's good to be back at Passions!  This poem is an oldie and I've re-written it a plethora of times - I'm such a perfectionist!! BUT I think that this will be my final polished copy. Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I think your final choice is an excellent one. But, you know us poets...we often still tweak a little from time to time. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"and when the paint dries there is black and the prince has a mistress in every kingdom" Three letter truth... WOW! That's all. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...but I hope it is no longer a lie...James |
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shirtless Member
since 2006-04-29
Posts 359 |
This poem is very effective. The references to dolls and fairy tales suggest the speaker sees her romantic view of love as childish naive. Then she directly addresses the Love who has made her feel this way, and the reader realizes that her words are a heartfelt response to the immediate pain of frustrated love. The poem ends with Romeo-like despair:"I am stone on broken bone / hope has no welcome here." But, it is safe to assume that speaker in this poem will, as Romeo did as pined for Rosalind, find new love irresistible. |
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poettothecars Senior Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 1093New Zealand |
Faith, hope and Charity , all three, where charity is a more pure form of love I never got this , when I first read your poem, however now I see more of what was expected. Even if very cliché , still an effective piece. There is nothing wrong with being cliché a poet who cares |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Melissa~ Romanticism is so very much alive when we pen~  Glad to see you back here ... sharing~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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