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Honeybee
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0 posted 2006-05-06 11:48 AM


Something So Foreign


Give me the familiar
the usual drudgery –
same old disappointment;
Drag me down, use me up
you are the lie that I believe.

Let me drink your poison
worship me with your daggers,
give me your isolation
let your demons lick my laugh.
I’ll be the hate you try to hide
inside your savage quiescence.

Any kind of touch
is better than none.
You always find my faults
manipulate, control them -
erase me
turn me upside down
inside out.

Beautiful liar
spread me open wide
itch my scratch
with the reptiles that crawl beneath your skin
slither their scars
across the broken thoughts
I cannot repair.

Disease my infection
hurt me to see if you still feel
gut me, but I won’t bleed
tell me I’m worthless
and I’ll become it.

Honour me,
love me...
and that would kill me.

By Melissa Long-Monette

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

© Copyright 2006 Melissa P. Long-Monette - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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1 posted 2006-05-06 01:35 PM


Melissa! Good to read you again!

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
2 posted 2006-05-06 01:45 PM



WELCOME HOME MELISSA!!!

~ Trace my body with your words,
  in doing so, you touch my heart ~

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2006-05-06 03:57 PM


Honeybee
LOL The best downer I've read in a long time. Would you like to ride a butterfly?

Les Gartner
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4 posted 2006-05-06 07:46 PM


Melissa,

This is a very powerful poem. You say a lot in what you do not say, yet it is difficult to squeeze in between the lines. Well done.

Les

SmartChick
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5 posted 2006-05-06 07:52 PM


Awwww, this is sad.
Archea
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6 posted 2006-05-13 04:00 AM


i agree, very sad.  liked it though...
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7 posted 2006-05-13 12:25 PM


This is a good write Melissa,but be careful what you wish for they say. No one can do anything to you unless you let them!  I gave that up years ago.
Sunshine
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8 posted 2006-05-17 08:35 PM



There was a challenge, recently,
about the art of negative imagery...

and I think this fits the bill
very well.

Welcome home, Little One!

Martie
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9 posted 2006-05-17 09:28 PM


Good to see you melissa!  There are many a great line in this sadness.  
Honeybee
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10 posted 2006-05-17 09:36 PM



It's an honour to receive replies from such talented poets (whom I've missed) - it's good to be back!

Even though this is the first time I've posted this poem here, it's actually an oldie - luckily I don't feel this way anymore nor do I have this kind of relationship   I'm still looking for Mr. Right though - but at least I know that I won't ever settle

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

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