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winewind
New Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 4

0 posted 2006-05-03 11:12 PM

Have you lost your wish
as a bird without wings
Then how can you see
flowers renascent in the ash

Maybe once languish
when the falls approach
becoming dust in the wind
it seems like such

What is beyond winter's touch
who will wake thyme and finch
facing breeze are the warm palms
turning down the low pitch

Stop by the saprolith
burying sorrow in the coming path
But ever, forever a new start is
gestated in the earth

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2006-05-04 07:33 AM

Awesome write!
Much enjoyed. Welcome to Passions.
TD

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

2 posted 2006-05-04 07:52 AM

beautiful!!!!!

Klassy Lassy
Member Elite

since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

3 posted 2006-05-04 04:41 PM

Welcome! You've come to joing our ponderings. Much enjoyed!

~ Klassy

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2006-05-04 04:54 PM

welcome to PIP
enjoyed your first write

Goldenrose
Member Elite

since 2003-05-30

Posts 3665

5 posted 2006-05-04 05:04 PM

Enjoyed this first write...but if i may ask..you ask questions in your poem..should they be accompanied with a question mark?....

if this is the kind of writing you create then we surely will have something to savour later..thank you for your words...and welcome to PIP...

Goldenrose.

''As the deer pants for steams of water, so my soul pants for you O God''
Psalm 42:1

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

6 posted 2006-05-04 05:10 PM

Welcome. This first offering is such an enjoyable refreshing read, I look forward to more from your quill.

winewind
New Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 4

7 posted 2006-05-04 06:10 PM

Thanks a lot for the comments! It is really a warm place to stay in.

To Goldenrose: yes, there should be question marks. I should pay more attention to this. It is my first time trying to write English poem. In the CLASSICAL poems in my native language, ppl seldom use interpunctions. It just a custom. But thanks a lot for pointing it out. You remind me its importance in English poems.

There are so much things I need to study from you

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