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shirtless
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since 2006-04-29
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0 posted 2006-04-30 12:09 PM



LIKE WATER

you say
you want truth,
but truth
is like water:
it’s the shape
of the sky;
it’s the shape
of this glass;
it’s the shape
of my mouth.
which truth
do you want?

you say
you want love,
but love
is like water:
it can bathe you;
it can cool you;
it can drown you.
which love
do you want?

you say
you want me,
but I
am like water:
I’m a mist;
I’m a splash;
I am ice.
which me
do you want?

you say
you want water,
but water
is like truth;
water
is like love;
water
is like me.
which water
do you want?

© Copyright 2006 Anthony Armstrong - All Rights Reserved
OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
1 posted 2006-04-30 09:09 AM


I am enjoying your poetry very much.  I like your style and the way you think, not necessarily what you think, but definitely the way you do so - thinking is a very exciting thing for me.  I also find your poetry very clever and beautifully structured (one small example is the five stanzas in Five Card Stud - I am not acquainted with most card games, but I gather that there is significance in five cards in poker).  

Glad to meet all four of you (water, mist, splash, ice)!  Hopefully "she" wants all four!

- Owl

Earth Angel
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2 posted 2006-04-30 09:15 AM


Hi, shirtless! Welcome to pipTalk!

I like a man who speaks the truth!

Giving you a warm, welcoming hug,
Earth Angel
Flowers

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
3 posted 2006-04-30 11:42 AM


All may quench a thirst.

  

write on..

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

BROTHER JOHN
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since 2006-04-06
Posts 386

4 posted 2006-04-30 02:55 PM


THANKS SHIRTLESS,

I WONDER,TOO, WHICH SHAPE SPIRIT TAKES?


passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2006-04-30 04:30 PM


I like this
The Lady
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The Southwest
6 posted 2006-05-01 12:05 PM




Oh, I like this very much.

froggy
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Michigan
7 posted 2006-05-18 07:40 AM


Tony,
just 2 words.... Love it.


:-)

Until he extends the circle of his compassion to all living things,
man will not himself find peace."

Albert Schweitzer,
Nobel Peace Prize Wi

Martie
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8 posted 2006-05-18 10:53 AM


shirtless....I really like this...was drawn to the title...water...so flexible...wonderful the way you applied it here.  Welcome to Pip!
JamesMichael
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9 posted 2006-05-18 06:40 PM


Enjoyed...James
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just out of reach
10 posted 2006-05-18 07:31 PM


Well done - much enjoyed !!
Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA
11 posted 2006-05-19 08:09 PM


Anthony~

I love this - poignant and softly powerful;  You took a well-used image and made it unique and your own. I relate to this and look forward to reading more poems of yours I'm saving this in my library.

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

Archea
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since 2006-05-13
Posts 65
United States
12 posted 2006-05-19 08:16 PM


i liked the rythm in this one.  very nice.
Debo
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Texas U.S.A.
13 posted 2006-05-21 05:56 PM


Well this poem just fits me to a tee
I really enjoyed reading this today
Now which one do you want? *he-he*

Debo

sweetberry
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14 posted 2006-05-24 02:20 AM


Nice write!
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with you
15 posted 2006-05-24 08:57 PM


neat write...

I like the way you turned it all around and gave it a twist....

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