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TO THY OWN SELF BE TRUE
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
My poems are underconstruction.I desire your comments to improve my writings since I am a novice. "TO THY OWN SELF BE TRUE" Within earth's frame of fleshly mortal clay, A secret passageway, yes, living door Abides beyond earth's stage since times of yore And leads beyond earth's props and passing day! This inner door's locked with yeas' and nays' sway Of scripted "playwrights" and "stars" by the score Who wrote and acted like those long before And rhymed each line with passionate staged play! The ceaseless knocking's from a higher tide And the "still small voice" deeply pleads within, "Let not dead manikins for you decide!" "In bowing to them, you against self sin But why?You own the key to your reside And only you decide to lose or win!!" |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Excellent job! You painted a beautiful picture with your words, and inspired us with your insight! Ben “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear EL, Thanks for stopping by and reading this. I feel very passionate about the way we are forced to conform to what I call "the scaffolding." It is amazing how the many do this. This is the theme in my poem, "The Armored Car". |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
For a novice you write very well. I enjoyed this work. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a very uplifting piece... full of strength |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
BROTHER JOHN If we were born we are a winner. |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
To The Lady, Thank you for reading this. Yes, a novice I am. However, I rewrite some of my poems countless times. Each one is different tho. I am sure you know what I mean. I am learning as I travel the poet's path and there is something very exciting about this adventure. Thanks again My Lady! |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Passing Shadows, I am honored again by your reading one of my poems. No, the unlifting comes from ones like you. I try to write for the joy of simply the poem. I know that you know what I mean. |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Seymour, I thank you for stopping by and reading this poem. You are a gifted poet and I am honored. I would like for you to write a poem on the statement you left with me. I would like to know more about the first word, IF. If makes or breaks and I am just curious. |
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