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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2006-04-21 07:54 AM

legs of sundown
leaning over her boredom
succedaneum satisfaction
of ocean eye appraisal

she wears the sand in her shoes
just for the sensations
of walking where others
have walked but didn't stay

because they were not tall enough
for the tides when they mated
distance beyond horizons
and found holes in the night

for their hands to hold
like the roots of trees
hewn from the wax of paper
and the sometimes voices

of a lyceum pretending to be wind

_______________

daark

scribblenote: rincon making evening wait for a moment along the frontage road

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2006-04-21 09:43 AM

It is always in the eye/I....

marvelous vieways...

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

2 posted 2006-04-21 09:56 AM

it all comes and goes
but the coming takes all
when it rains

Klassy Lassy
Member Elite

since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

3 posted 2006-04-21 05:01 PM

Sometimes the wind on the ocean is pure loneliness. I love the word paint in this, and the images of

"hands to hold
like the roots of trees
hewn from the wax of paper"

feels like the bond of ages, somehow fragile, the things we come to fear off in the distance beyond current consciousness.

It's been a while since I've been to the ocean. Soon....

~ Klassy

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

4 posted 2006-04-22 12:49 PM

And I love...

"she wears the sand in her shoes
just for the sensations
of walking where others
have walked but didn't stay"

Another good one Stranger.

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2006-04-23 12:55 PM

I loved this ... legs of sundown
leaning over her boredom
succedaneum satisfaction
of ocean eye appraisal

Actually I could have posted the entire piece, it was one of your best.

backtash123
Junior Member

since 2006-04-22

Posts 46

6 posted 2006-04-23 08:39 AM

My favorite line was
"she wears the sand in her shoes"

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

7 posted 2006-04-24 07:52 AM

thanks to each of you pipfriends

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