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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813
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simple staleness a much needed breath of fresh air at the time it seemed a good enough reason for the cracking of the door but sure as it was open the spirit of unrest slipped in unnoticed innocent restlessness cramped and stifled by the lack of excitement or so that day it seemed the reason the blue sky screamed and took my eyes to the sky but featherless my arms flap at my sides useless to fulfill this need mere irritations or so each one seemed but quick as I let them take root they beset my movements at every turn my lack of flight now amplified reason now refuses its voice as my featherless limbs hang despondently that this is no fault of mine I try to claim as this spirit of unease to whom I gave admittance bit by bit steals my delight staleness or so it seemed the reason for cracking the door... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Unfortunately... some things blow in through opened doors that leave you with no breath... just ache. *S* This touches in so many ways, my friend... excellent write! |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
thank you my friend, unfortunately this is written from hindsight...and sigh, the door now doesn't even seem to sit right on the hinges...would that I had never.... well...you know.... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"reason now refuses its voice as my featherless limbs hang despondently" ~ Si triste. So sad. I could feel those disempowered lines in the pit of my solar plexus. Sending you a warm hug o' love, Linda  |
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WindWalker Senior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 1218 |
I can really feel the sadness in this poem! And I agree, excellent write!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Excellent poem. It worries me that you are so very sad. Try realising the power and pleasure and wonder of walking - putting one foot in front of each other and moving the body from over one foot to over the other - and wonder at the amount of distance that can be covered! So much safer than flying - and you can look around you so much more easily while walking than while flying - see dragonflies wings glinting in the sun, the colours of delicate butterfly wings, the thousands of shades of green on one tree, the buzz of insects, the song of birds, the warmth of sun embracing your shoulders on a winter's day - for a start. Smiles - Owl |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
earthangel, windwalker, owlsa, thankyou so much, I am not as sad as I sound, or should I say at least not to my knowledge...it almost seems odd to read that I am...maybe I am so used to it that it is the more the norm than not so any way, owlsa, thankyou, I used your advice in the sequel  hope you like it |
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