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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
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South Africa

0 posted 2006-04-17 07:55 AM


Take out the story and what have you got?

A spirit entwined with the workings of mind
that can change destiny with a whisper of feel
imperceptibly rising from out of the soul ~
and just like the sun this rise-up inside
too autumn weak to exterminate love
and the burn and blister of amazing grace.

There is grace, you see, inside of a soul
fluid in motion to make itself known …
and, yikes, a mouse shivers my bones
and all thoughts of love shudder and moan
because summer, you know,
was so long ago.

And so with the grace invested in me
I ran from that mouse in the house
back into summer’s incredible feel
in mental release from fear
but there still is a mouse like there is love
alone behind doors closed to it all.

Take out the story and what have you got?

A plain flesh and bone woman grown old
alone in a house with a mouse!  

Helen / 17 April 2006


© Copyright 2006 Helen - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
1 posted 2006-04-17 09:58 AM


I was wondering by the title what this was about

now I see!

I like it!

openthoughts
Member
since 2006-01-16
Posts 94
Where the child can be free
2 posted 2006-04-17 11:51 AM


interesting word choice that definitly leaves the reader thinking.  This is a poem that I will definitly need to read more than once
Ericc
Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178

3 posted 2006-04-17 12:36 PM


Excellent...your talent grows deeper and deeper with each poem!

Eric

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
4 posted 2006-04-17 01:40 PM


Thanks Dixie, openthoughts, and Eric! Wow, Eric, too deep and I may bury myself one day but not yet - too many stories still to tell unless something takes the story out and leaves just me!
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