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Part one: Now and Still
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Part one: Now and Still |
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BlackEyedBueaty07 Junior Member
since 2006-04-05
Posts 27rittman, ohio |
Now and Still Part one... I dont want to be here I dont like my life Als i want to do is die I dont even know why But i want it to end Everything ive already dreamed of is already dead I dont want to be in this situation Now knowing what to do Where to go, What to say No I dont want to be here I want to be gone This life is confusing its like im already gone Because no one notices me My family dosent understand Nethier do some of my friends... -to be continued...- |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
*bump* |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I dont want to be in this situation Now knowing what to do Where to go, What to say I think many of us can identify with these feelings. *S* Ordinarily... I'd consider offering a gentle suggestion that the poem be posted in its entirety instead of using the "to be continued"... in part because I like the whole story at once. *S* But it works here... for when you're in these depths, they seem to continue ad infinitum You express your emotions well and I'll look forward to reading more of your work... Meanwhile... I hope things improve for you! *S* |
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Les Gartner Junior Member
since 2006-04-10
Posts 37MD |
I think that Suthern is right. You're expressing yourself very beautifully and things will improve for you. Use your poetic talent to lessen the burden. Les |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
...and I agree with Suthern and Les. Keep writing till you write your way out of this place. |
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