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passing shadows
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0 posted 2006-04-14 06:26 PM



Underneath the confident smile,
the brave walk, talk, and style,
I am a frightened little girl-
            no one knows I'm not so strong,
            I've been here by myself so long,
            lonely in a crowded world.

I was fool enough to actually believe
that what I gave I would receive,
I was always there for you-
            but I am no longer young, naive,
            I wear independence, you perceive
            that my heart is not askew.

I've grown old with half of you
and died with only a piece or two,
a scared and lonely ghost-
            I'll strut happy and smile my rhyme
            and forget well that you had no time
            when it was what I needed most.


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© Copyright 2006 Dixie Lee Bullington - All Rights Reserved
Goldenrose
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1 posted 2006-04-14 07:24 PM


Perhaps your best poem to date..it is honest..true..revealing...sad..brave...but very good...thank you for these words...they may hurt..but this is reality never put more starkly..God bless you...you are never alone while i am your friend...

Goldenrose.

shades of paul
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2 posted 2006-04-14 10:13 PM


Good poem with feeling.
Nice pic,too.
paul


shades of peace,love,and happiness to you

bubblesleave
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3 posted 2006-04-14 11:21 PM


A wonderful write!

Well constuctedd....the meter is fantasic!

You are a talent!

Hugs,
Bubbles


latearrival
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4 posted 2006-04-15 09:31 AM


You are too much my friend. How you can pump out these beautiful verses and still feel so alone and fragile I do not know. So many here care for you and have proven that. Accept the love that surrounds you my friend.  Time now for a few of your happy  fun writes. YOU ARE LOVED


Earth Angel
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5 posted 2006-04-15 11:09 AM


" I'll strut happy and smile my rhyme"

~ Thatta girl, Darlin' Dixie!

Wonderfully emotive write! Deeply moving!


Linda
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6 posted 2006-04-15 11:16 AM


I must agree with Linda: "Wonderfully emotive write! Deeply moving!" And well crafted!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Paul Wilson
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7 posted 2006-04-15 01:35 PM


Dixie...Beautiful words. This really shows the tender side of you. Thanks so much for sharing with us...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

Androgynous
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8 posted 2006-04-15 06:31 PM


"lonely in a crowded world"

This seemed far too familiar. What a heartfelt piece this was. And as some special poems tend to do with me, it reminded me of a song, if you don't know it you'd might like to check it out. Faith, by The Cure. One of my all time favourite songs. http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/cure/faith.html


Love

"How happy is the blameless vestal's lot!
The world forgetting, by the world forgot.
Eternal sunshine of the spotless mind!"

Ericc
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9 posted 2006-04-17 12:41 PM


Deeply felt and beautifuly penned.

Eric

luminosity
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10 posted 2006-04-17 12:43 PM


I agree with Goldenrose, perhaps your best...if you didn't have so many exceptional ones already.......sigh...
wow lady.....I think you are getting the the very heart of you

FNG
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11 posted 2006-04-18 07:31 AM


I love this one, it speaks for me when im in a state of loneliness. Close to the heart.
sweetberry
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12 posted 2006-04-22 07:25 PM


"LONELY IN A CROWDED WORLD"  You couldn't have hit the nail on the head more accurate. Absolutely one of my favorites!  You've done it again Miss Dixie.  It felt as if you wrote this for me...Thanx so much, just what I needed!!!!
icebox
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13 posted 2006-04-22 08:23 PM


Excellent.

This is all true, and yet I have always seen dignity in your writing.

(you should tell your little self that you will keep her safe now.)

*hug*


backtash123
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14 posted 2006-04-23 08:22 AM


This poem describes, sometimes what im feeling. Great poem!
passing shadows
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15 posted 2006-04-23 03:52 PM


I'm so touched by all of your replies, each one

icebox... thanks

Juju
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16 posted 2006-04-23 06:56 PM


Lovely as always

-Juju

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17 posted 2006-04-23 07:24 PM


This is indeed one of your best... And how could it not be beautiful, considering the heart it shows? *S*
SmartChick
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18 posted 2006-04-24 08:33 AM


This is so sad Dixie. I know how it feels to be so alone.
Pilgrimage
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19 posted 2006-04-25 11:46 AM


I love the construction of this one.  Excellent poem, it made me feel the alone, the suffering.  

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

JamesMichael
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20 posted 2006-04-25 06:59 PM


Fabulous writing..."I was fool enough to actually believe that what I gave I would receive."  I have also been so foolish, and yet, at the time I could not stop myself...perhaps when we give it to the wrong person it fails to bring fruit...James
passing shadows
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21 posted 2006-04-26 06:15 AM


James, that is so true, so very ture

thanks for such lovely replies, all of you

The Lady
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22 posted 2006-04-26 11:49 PM



"Underneath the confident smile,
the brave walk, talk, and style,
I am a frightened little girl-"

So fragile... so skillfully written.


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