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those that bend |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813
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i. colored to suit the need mind bender plying a mind bender’s wares dictionary bound words familiar to sight and sound but with definitions trimmed to meet the need the utterer’s charismatic force applied pressure transforming the undiscerning minds of the ticketed objectives seated row by row before him chameleon in www dot here I am format she Morse coded her needs for the world to see shortly thereafter the chameleon’s roaming eye zeroed in edging closer and before her very eyes became everything she ever needed and wanted ii. pragmatically speaking unbent too good to be true usually turns out to be too good to be true so when the night air hits the face with fresh air and a newly dented fender shoulders straighten and “Get Rich Quick” hits the trash without a backwards look black and white her desires went forth shaded in momentary misconstrue but hungry and sensing a weakness ripe and ready to be preyed upon the chameleon reached further than ever before his tongue greedily flicked out then snapped backwards and in stark black and white she watched as he misapprehended her need and swallowed it whole [This message has been edited by luminosity (04-14-2006 06:48 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You painted shades of reality with chameleon clarity.  EA  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
unbent too good to be true usually turns out to be too good to be true so when the night air hits the face with fresh air and a newly dented fender shoulders straighten and “Get Rich Quick” hits the trash without a backwards look ------------------------------------------- Amazing writing here m'friend.... yep, and do I ever understand those shades of reality... huggin you tight.... seek the flame within yourself |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
EA, thank you  GS, the me in this was mostly the last verse, but to learn how to not get there again, I had to back up to the beginning and paint those that bend and are bent in reality |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is amazing work! outstanding! I was going to pick a favorite line but there are too many and that ending! wow! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Excellent! Although I followed each poem in the suite, I didn't get the connectivity until you pointed it out in your response. Yes, sadly this happens all too often in many variations of the last poem. However, when one has clarity on it as you do, it is easier to break the mould. May you find lasting happiness with the right person soon. - Owl |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
this has so many layers, and it is so well done. thank you xxx farewell the ash-tray girl |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
thank you all...I had it in the format of side by side, but could not get PIP's html requirements to let me do it..... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
in www dot here I am format she Morse coded her needs for the world to see When I saw the title, my first response was a thought of my own category... those that break. *S* So I wasn't expecting this... But it's excellent! *S* |
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