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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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I keep my burden close So nothing spills out upon your shoes This darkness I prefer Has nothing to do with not wanting you I carry a weight on my shoulders Drags me down and I can’t pretend This world will every be what I want and I won’t let you waste yourself Or feel sorry for me It doesn’t mean I don’t love you With every little tiny part of good I have But this illness wears me out and in No matter how much I want you There is no place to begin With me I wish so much more for you Then I am capable of giving It kills me to have to pull away Yet I know if you stay This shroud of impossible and eternally doomed Will engulf you too I wouldn’t be able to handle Seeing the light go from your eyes I couldn’t bare the thought of your dreams dying Because of the lack of mine It doesn’t mean I don’t love you With every little tiny part of good I have But this illness wears me out and in No matter how much I want you There is no place to begin With me --------------------------------- For a friend, because it must be hard.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Susan I understand this feeling from my own life. You wrote it very well.  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Susan, from the poems of yours that I have had the pleasure of reading, I gather that you have had a wide range of life experiences. It is from this well (and your compassionate heart) that you are able to draw your understanding of what others are going through in their own lives. You have a caring ~ and poetic! ~ soul. Hugs with love, Linda  |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
this just aches i love you enough...to let you ...go |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you, Martie, Linda and Helen. I couldn't get this out of my mind when a friend told me this is what they had done... I kept wondering if they saw the irony of thinking they are lost, with no redeeming factors (or very little) and that they cared so deeply for someone else that they put that person before themselves....  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"This darkness I prefer Has nothing to do with not wanting you" ...uh... ...uh... ...uh... ...OK...no words in my head...did you take them all? |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
No matter how much I want you There is no place to begin *********************** and so it goes sometimes, its just best that way...too much work for some people to hold on |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Susan~ firstly  secondly I could read you for hours on end....you have so much truth within you and it shows when you write....   And so it those we live with |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Icy, I doubt that you are ever out of words..and I for one could listen to you forever. Michele, not too much work, but rather an illness they have little control over and they don't want that burden on the other. It's the ultimate sacrifice.Lauren, thank you,  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...very, very powerful. Eric |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
I can say for sure that feeling can be overcome! You describe it hurtfully well Susan. Something that is hard for the person experincing that sort of pain to do. Your friend is in my prayers! :-) |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Such an ache in your words Susan. You have such a caring soul. Heart hugs, Nancy ~ Trace my body with your words, |
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lyricpoet Member
since 2005-07-16
Posts 199NY, USA |
Very powerful write with alot of emotional depth! |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
A most impressive write but so very, very, sad. Life isn't just unfair - it's downright despicable at times. |
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sweetberry Member
since 2006-03-29
Posts 125 |
I enjoyed this write...very touching! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
geez...so many replies I was remiss in thanking!! Thank you!  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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