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Juju
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0 posted 2006-04-09 02:13 AM


I fall, you fall, we all fall together


I fall, you fall, we all fall together
We are like rain's race to touch ground
The first one there kisses the earth below
It makes its way for everything else

I fall, you fall, we all fall together
Like clock work syncopation there is time
A moment we call our own, all before
The second hand moves on to the hours

I fall, you fall, we all fall together
can such laughter and joy, such irony
that there must be that first person
for rain and time does not fall together

for there are drops of rain as seconds in time


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bubblesleave
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1 posted 2006-04-09 03:12 AM


Very good poem!  Great meter!!!

Hugs,
Bubbles

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2 posted 2006-04-09 12:00 PM


Nicely done!  A very well expressed and thought out poem.  Life is like rainddrops.  One falls by in one second and in the next, another, just like raindrops falling, one after another.  A very unique poem.  Like one I have never read before.

Sheri Adams

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3 posted 2006-04-09 05:57 PM


JuJu, girl, it's so good to read you again!
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