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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2006-04-03 07:52 AM


there were no overshoes
just the toes of water feet
climbing windows

looking for higher ground
in a glass of someone's drinking
the clouds are mothers without mates

littering on purpose as if the giving
is better than the receiving
but then they would have that religion

since they are god's carpeting
and think the grass people are heathen
needing to be saved from tan

or the final weed free burning
on their last day judgement
every wednesday afternoon 'bout 3

'cept when it rains or on holidays
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daark

scribblenote:  about the rain this am, and the lawn that gets mowed on wed..the clouds seem to have motherly notions, and the grass well it seem childish..etc


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Martie
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1 posted 2006-04-03 01:53 PM


DS...How about a scribble-note.  My mind can't quie grasp the meaning of your words today.  Ingriqueing, as always, you are!
Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2006-04-03 02:10 PM


lol...now little neighbor I thought you would be jumping in puddles with this one..thanks for the eyes babe
Martie
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3 posted 2006-04-03 02:17 PM


Oh!!  I think I got it.  It hasn't started raining here yet!  I jump with bare feet, not overshoes. LOL
Klassy Lassy
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4 posted 2006-04-03 03:54 PM


"since they are god's carpeting
and think the grass people are heathen
needing to be saved from tan"

What a metaphor!  To think of cool grass under bare feet ot on hot summer days....  The idea of summer right now is so enchanting as the wind is still cold and clouds spread themselve like gray blankets over my yen for blue sky.  

Dark Stranger
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5 posted 2006-04-03 04:35 PM


ms martie, thanks lady friend..it is heading your way I think.

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ms kl, thanks ms, am pleased you enjoyed the teeth in this grin.

Klassy Lassy
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6 posted 2006-04-03 07:11 PM


Could never resist boyish grins or puddles, barefoot or not, and I wonder if heathens mind dandelions and bachelor buttons.  Somehow, I'm guessing NOT....always liked the blue tenacity of morning glory, too.  


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7 posted 2006-04-03 07:24 PM


Dark

you have that way of saying things, like no other, and that way of allowing the reader to see through your eyes.....you are pure poetry...

And so it those we live with
and should know who elude us
But we can still love them
we can love completely
without complete understanding

Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2006-04-03 07:27 PM


ms KL thanks so muccccch..

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lady lauren, thank you for your way of brushing my smile ms

Sunshine
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9 posted 2006-04-03 09:36 PM


the clouds are mothers without mates

~*~

This lent thought to much more than clouds...
it even encompassed the fogs of the pass...
among the hills and valleys...

when it doesn't rain, but you still end up
wet.

You made me [again] remember some very special times...

thank you.


icequeen
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10 posted 2006-04-03 09:53 PM


there were no overshoes
just the toes of water feet
climbing windows

Love this - I am a windowpane watcher when it rains, staring at the little patterns the raindrops run and waiting to see which one gets back up from the bottom to pull up another with it. We need rain so badly here. Perhaps your poem will bring some to us.   I can already see the rainbow in your pen.


Caroline

He who wants a rose must respect the thorn.
- Persian Proverb

The Lady
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11 posted 2006-04-04 12:16 PM




"the clouds are mothers without mates"

Stranger I wait for your poetry so I can envy you your way with words.


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