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HopeS
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since 2000-12-22
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Perth Western Australia

0 posted 2006-03-31 06:31 AM



Open Without Closure

Whilst thoughts collect
Verses go here and there
Nothing comes together
My heart I need to repair

Trying to fill in the blank
I have empty space blues
With poems incomplete
The frustration continues

Intervals and line breaks
While still feeling despair
Lacking the parts I need
Poems I left up in the air

Sinking upon every sigh
I am open without closure
No verse could illustrate
My break down exposure


HopeĀ©2006
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passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
1 posted 2006-04-06 02:33 AM


empty space blues, yeah I know what those are

sometimes we are left having to find closure ourselves when others can't see we need it and they can provide it for us

HopeS
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since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596
Perth Western Australia
2 posted 2006-04-06 02:44 AM


Thank you Dixie  ,hugs to you friend ,  you know where I am coming from and why it was written

Hugs Hope

poettothecars
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since 2006-02-10
Posts 1093
New Zealand
3 posted 2006-04-06 03:14 AM


While I understand the "empty space blues"

To me that is the line that does not fit

But in saying that, in the absence of that statement, there would indeed be an empty space.

Sure at times, we have to take the thoughts and feelings for what they are

Thanks for wracking my mind to think.

a poet who cares

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