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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Rewrite: Commitment She the tongue that strikes the bell He the wrung and tolling shell Floating o’er the valleys green Eden of the lovers’ scene Vibrations we think are frail Forever wail in ghostly sail Nirvana flies within the store Touching tasting every shore Sentience does try the goal Cutting echoes in the soul Doubt and earthquake stir and shock But here this alter stays a rock Garroting seems to choke the head Seething thwarts the wedding bed But holy vows and oaths were swore And hemlock cannot kill the core She the tongue that strikes the bell And he the wrung and tolling shell |
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bslicker 
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
enjoyed bernie  A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hmmm! Sounds like another cruise is in order!   Loveya, T-Man! EA  |
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Buttons Junior Member
since 2006-02-27
Posts 34 |
Incredible write! Buttons |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh mercy!  It's the wrath of Isabel!  I love Earth Angel's reply - LOL, perhaps she is right Sy? |
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Grinch Member Elite
since 2005-12-31
Posts 2929Whoville |
Very well written – I think the word is tight – or maybe it’s succinct, either way I enjoyed the read. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
another Sy masterpiece |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
your the best My spirit will rise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
To all the above thank you all so much. I have a bad cold and snuck out of bed to answer you. |
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