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exhale
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since 2003-06-13
Posts 646
Alberta,Canada

0 posted 2006-03-24 07:34 PM


if these are all my words
then why has my breathing stopped

ohh my feet are hitting the pavement
and I can feel every little pebble
and I can smell every drop of
gas o linnnneee
ohh you know I like it that way
you know I like to feel the electricity
flowing up from my feet
I'm standing in a puddle
would you mind handing me that blow dryer
sweetheart
don't take it personal
I haven't seen enough to make that personal
ohh but I've heard enough
the sky can keep falling
and I can keep laughing
told you so told you so told you so
but hey,
what's better
than a society stocked full of ducktape
it burns to rip it off
but how would I know that?
rip it like a bandaid
rip it like a bandaid


I've sold my train of thought
to a boy on the street handing out dreams
I thought he was real
I thought it was true
instant
gra.ti.fi.ca.ti.on
oh I'm sorry,
did I hit too close to home

you live in words
you live in my words
I wrote you
I made you
I can erase you
it's the best gift I can give you
but I'm good for nothing
I can't even give you that

© Copyright 2006 Chelsea - All Rights Reserved
Goldenrose
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since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665

1 posted 2006-03-24 07:48 PM


Abstract but with a deeper meaning here...like you are the creator who create all of this flux...and can just as easily write anything in or out...a reversal of reality...inverted upon itself..you dont write reality..reality is written by you..interesting write..thank you..

Goldenrose.

exhale
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since 2003-06-13
Posts 646
Alberta,Canada
2 posted 2006-03-24 07:57 PM


I love that you took the time to think about it.
To me, in essence, it's supposed to be the contradiction, the creation and the destruction all in one.
Writing reality, but where am I writing it.

Or maybe, I just drink too much coffee.

Goldenrose
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since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665

3 posted 2006-03-24 08:46 PM


You possibly do drink to much coffee..but only you would know that ..when you say ''where'' are you writing it from, do you mean from what moment in time? What instant in time?...Buddhists have a good idea about placement in the great scheme of things..and they come down to the immutable fact of cause and effect...eg. if i said something derogatory to a man in the street, a total stranger, he would get upset, but his wife got more upset, so much so she punched me in the nose....But lets rewind a little..i brought this upon myself..by being derogatory to the man in the first place hence the cause and effect....it is kind of reap what you shall sow...but the buddhist thought is strengthened by adding the altruistic acts..and strict non violent actions..so unless a person does not like nice attention and thoughtful deed..they are in a win win situation and therefore their inner God is fed...if only all mankind was this way...

Goldenrose.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
4 posted 2006-03-25 02:43 AM


If we didn't have death, we wouldn't know life, dark to know light, etc. but where we are exactly in the scheme of creation is anybody's guess.  And I too blame it all on the coffee - easier that way!
Helen

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