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A Thirst I Can Not Seem To Quench
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A Thirst I Can Not Seem To Quench |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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One day, maybe soon, this vagabond heart of mine will look out upon a living moon for the last time with eyes that become more vacant every day. I could be bitter at the way I let you spin my life too fast in circles for a little while, until my grip on things once weighed with meaning just couldn’t last, and these eyes, still fast back then, could not help but see the trappings of my life quickly tearing out and falling free, shed like feathers having lost their usefulness save for one more aimless trip, scattered on a careless wind. In private ways, by which I’ve long known can be measured old, I stand now nearly naked mercifully ignored within the shallow tides of ever flowing and preoccupied younger souls who rush headlong driven by the hunger for lives they seem never to understand. I don’t criticize them out of hand and in no way conjure malice, it was after all just a thoughtless cast of fate that I started into ending long before they could begin, and even now in my time of knowing I have no sense or feeling for this wind that seems to reach at random within the fading boundaries of my soul, my quiet waiting none too patient oh so tired vagrant soul. ©2006 by icebox |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow.... I don't know what else to say...this is powerful with wisdom and an understanding of things, I hope to have one day |
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Rainbowdust Member
since 2002-12-05
Posts 320Sydney, Australia |
Icebox, I agree with sea, this is amazing. Another one for my library. The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears. |
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Rainbowdust Member
since 2002-12-05
Posts 320Sydney, Australia |
*tiptoes back blushing furiously* Darn it, I forgot to tick the 'Add Threat to Library' box. Done now. *tiptoes away again* The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"and even now in my time of knowing I have no sense or feeling for this wind that seems to reach at random within the fading boundaries of my soul," Mr. C., I think you are much too modest about the knowing part. Thank you for this very special poem which I'll add to my treasure box. Who knows when our last gaze at the moon will be and where it will be?. My best to you, friend.  ...jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I prolly never told you this, but I love all of your poetry. The longer ones, such as these, still break down into touching sensible heartache--if such a thing exists--here's what I mean--take the first line from every verse, and it's a poem all by itself: "One day I could be bitter in private ways. I don't critcize them out of hand-- (and yes, I would break here to add a summation--) it was afterall just a thoughtless cast of fate that I started into ending. and yeah, how dare me edit you...grin. *laughing* I got spunk. Some people hate spunk. I say it depends on what they've been eatin'.  Loved this. Love you, Charly.  |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Mr. icebox - Okay - I give up! I've tried three replies now and I just plain and simply get carried away. Better by far to just commend your writing for its excellence (which I do now most heartedly) and leave opinions and theories for ... another life! But here's a hug meanwhile!  Helen |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I cannot tell you in words what this heartfelt most profound write made me feel...I just wanted to cry and say I'm sorry to everyone and everything, that I've ever hurt, or althered their lives in any bad way...and without going any further, would also like to echo Karen and Henen's comment...adding, it is poets as yourself, that make me so warmly gifted to be a part of such a poetry site...thank you |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
icebox Sad.....this makes me sad. It's a good thing to be aware, but I think you might be too aware. |
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