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Ixtab
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since 1999-06-23
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MEXICAlpan de las tunas

0 posted 2006-03-22 12:36 PM


Stars are eyes,
and though they hang from far heaven's reach
they still can gaze within my skin
and behold this galaxy of essence and blood.

As if they saw a mirror, in my heart
All the stars in the sky know me,
they silently beckon my attention
and I humbly bow before my own reflection.

This walking dust that I am,
that shining dust that speaks above at night
we are kindred of the same event
that time when time began.


(PS. i encourage critique, even if my profile says otherwise.. could anyone please tell me how do I change that in my profile?
thanks.

Ixtab, 13-espejo.



© Copyright 2006 Ixtab - All Rights Reserved
iliana
Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
1 posted 2006-03-22 12:39 PM


WOW!  I like this very, very much!  
Rainbowdust
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since 2002-12-05
Posts 320
Sydney, Australia
2 posted 2006-03-22 01:16 AM


This is so profound and beautiful, no criticism necessary! This is one for my library too!  

The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
3 posted 2006-03-22 08:14 PM


This is very well written.

To change your critique message.

Go to your Profile, scroll down and check the Encourage Critiques box.

Any problems drop me an email.

Hugs~Nancy

~ Trace my body with your words,
  in doing so, you touch my heart ~

Ixtab
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since 1999-06-23
Posts 105
MEXICAlpan de las tunas
4 posted 2006-03-23 02:07 AM


Iliana, Rainbowdust thanks for the read and the comment.  I don't know if it is that well written but thanks anyway. I posted another poem recently and I beleive it's a bit better than this.

Thanks Enchantress i'll try it out.

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