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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2006-03-21 09:50 AM



In dim gray light
The ridges and valleys
In sheets disclosed

Portraits on the walls
Open their eyes
On shoes and clothes
Strewn randomly
Across the floor

You lie still asleep
A breast rising and falling
Gently as you breathe

Life into this love we share
In dreams a part
Of who we are



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1 posted 2006-03-21 11:51 PM


WOW!

This is beyond fantastic!

A total keeper

curiouse
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2 posted 2006-03-22 07:50 AM


this poem is wonderfully intimate and deep it's a great read and believe me it is beyond fantastic. oh i'm curiose about where you got your name from "haun yi" because there are a lot of backgrounds or just imagination that it could be from
Huan Yi
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3 posted 2006-03-22 08:40 AM



Thank you both


Curiouse, Huan Yi was a 14th Century Chinese
musician who created "Three Variations on a
Theme of Plum Blossoms" of which I have
through CD purchases several performances.


Again Thanks

John


curiouse
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4 posted 2006-03-22 10:27 AM


thanx for that it thought it had somthing to do with chinese any way i love your poetry and hope to read more
love
me
xxx

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5 posted 2006-03-23 04:36 PM


I feel I've peeked and seen something not for my eyes... but can't regret the knowing. *S* Lovely!!!
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6 posted 2006-03-30 04:01 AM


... Lovely

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7 posted 2006-03-30 05:45 AM


definite keeper!
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8 posted 2007-04-27 03:50 PM


everything is going to wake now.
spring, spring, spring!

beautiful

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