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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2006-03-21 08:13 AM



with the rivers she came
from the side of moss mountain
her limbs were antichrist bent
searching the dark ground for life

I remember her eyes between the leaves
a thousand perhaps but others too
were closed pretending the night
had sand manned them to slumber

but the sun between hesitations
shimmered of prose unprofessional
blatant with respect for the sparrows
but condescending to the winds

that would provide her some spiritual
with hymns of gasping whispers
hissed in harmony between metal roofs
and how it plays the tin, the wind

even the statue women would love him
_______________

daark

scribnote: just a storm and a tree and a bunch of invisible stuff that I see when I wear the blind man's hat

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1 posted 2006-03-21 08:31 AM


one can read it in many ways~
your very good at doing that~
painting a picture  ~ you make it sensual~
then if one read it the other way~attitude

     either way, your good at what you do
  have a great day
i think i shall have some korn
and seek refuge from porn~

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2006-03-21 08:40 AM


ms G..thanks for the eyes ms..enjoy the Korn..
LeeJ
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3 posted 2006-03-21 08:47 AM


just a storm and a tree and a bunch of invisible stuff that I see when I wear the blind man's hat

I've read you a lot, and have witnessed your incredible wearing your aware eyes, upon nature speaking to you...
I've witnessed your amazement to, and the aloofness, your all emotions symbolized within nature's miraculous life...touching yours, touching ours...

this poem of yours today, I think your best...
your images are outstanding...which stand alone, taking each word by the hand, in testimony of the feeling your middle eye gives.

no my poet friend, much more then "just a storm" you make light of your incredible emotions...and what you see...far deeper then most.

Thank you

Klassy Lassy
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4 posted 2006-03-21 09:27 AM


"I remember her eyes between the leaves" ...when I was perhaps four years old, my mother left me with a sitter. I used to play under a willow tree in the yard.   Silver-lime leaves nearly swept the ground, weaving lace of sunlight and shadows all around me...and the bedroom there, with it's beige lace curtains and hand crocheted bedspred seemed alive with shadows and dappled sunlight. Strangely enough, that is all I can remember of that place and time where things were sunny and muted in my childhood.  The woman who cared for me while my mother worked remains faceless, but the willow tree was magic!

Thank you, Daark!  Your poem holds lifetimes.  It's somehow stark, yet full of lovely possiblities.  

Dark Stranger
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5 posted 2006-03-21 10:39 AM


ms Lee J, you are a woman of gifts, thanks to you for your words this day.


_______________

ms KL..then I guess it was your vision I was reading here...I did seem small in my mind as I looked out the window of thought toward this place..glad it brought back memories, thanks lady friend

The Lady
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6 posted 2006-03-21 12:49 PM




"blatant with respect for the sparrows
but condescending to the winds"

Just a storm and a tree and some invisible stuff, is it? And you with the blind man's hat?
Even your scrib notes read like a poem. I think I suffer from poet's envy.


Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2006-03-21 02:31 PM


lady ms, you make me smile with your comments, thanks to you, a very humble thanks
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8 posted 2006-03-21 04:32 PM


DS

I can relate to the sound of rain on tin....I always love to hear it on the back of my old alluminum boat...the rain plays beautiful music.  So do you!  

Dark Stranger
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9 posted 2006-03-21 05:23 PM


thannnnnnks ms martie, you are a friend with your eyes here
Air Goddess
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10 posted 2006-03-23 08:59 PM


If that was just a storm and a tree,
well then, you make them appear
interesting....

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