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Honeybunch
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0 posted 2006-03-20 02:46 AM


If love is this life’s greatest hit
I guess I’m a lousy shot
but maybe my arrows are weighted
with layers and layers of fear
laid over the cracks of heartbreak
experienced over the years.

I’m sure I could go for lessons;
aim it just so and let go,
but housekeeping always comes first
and a clean heart takes diligent work
before it can shoot for the stars
and bag for itself a sense of peace.

So now it is clean and ready, I feel,
but each thought brings up the dirt
from under the covers of memory
that speaks of dastardly deeds.

It’s a long shot, you see, this waiting to be
seen and believed as a pure beauty queen
but love isn’t deflected off course
by mere skin of past history
unless, unless, it’s not really true
and sure of its target market.

Yeah, sure, it’s perceived as a grand rebirth
but at the end of the day … I’m saved
from shooting myself in the feet
with those damn useless arrows of fear!

Helen / 20 March 2006


© Copyright 2006 Helen - All Rights Reserved
cody 2
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london
1 posted 2006-03-20 08:49 AM


sometimes we are so busy looking behind we forget to look in front, good write
Honeybunch
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2 posted 2006-03-20 09:01 AM


Cody2 - Thank you for reading and for commenting.  Sometimes we just don't see ourselves as worthy of more and that in itself is a ... sin!
iliana
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3 posted 2006-03-21 02:26 AM


You're just wonderful, Helen!  May that arrow stay straight and sure!  Missed you......*hugs*.....jo
Honeybunch
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4 posted 2006-03-21 03:47 AM


Yes, my arrows always do, dear Jo, but the target doesn't know.     
iliana
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5 posted 2006-03-21 04:08 PM


Good point, Helen....jo  *hugs*
miscellanea
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6 posted 2006-03-21 04:42 PM


Honeybunch,

   Sure enjoyed your writing and responses.  Guess I have to plead guilty to this one: "Sometimes we just don't see ourselves as worthy of more and that in itself is a ... sin!"    Interesting thought, probably very true!  Now to convince myself...that's another thing.  We are our own worse critic!

   Hoping the arrows point to good things for you.

         miscellanea

  

Honeybunch
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7 posted 2006-03-22 12:03 PM


Misc. Two things in life - maybe the purpose of life - come back to knowing that "we are love" and then to help other people in that endeavour. I happen to know, you see, that unconditional love is the yardstick of our lives when everything else is taken away from us. The giving of it - not necessarily the receiving of it but too at the end of the day what one gives, one receives.  That's the law of the universe Believe it or not.
(And it wasn't too bad up there on the soapbox)
Take care!
Helen    

Martie
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8 posted 2006-03-22 12:45 PM


Helen

"Two things in life - maybe the purpose of life - come back to knowing that "we are love" and then to help other people in that endeavour. I happen to know, you see, that unconditional love is the yardstick of our lives when everything else is taken away from us. The giving of it - not necessarily the receiving of it but too at the end of the day what one gives, one receives.  That's the law of the universe  Believe it or not."  Oh....I believe it!!  I really liked your poem too!  

Honeybunch
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9 posted 2006-03-22 12:51 PM


Whew! And here I thought I was alone ... up there on the soapbox.  
Thanks, Martie, for reading and believing.

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
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10 posted 2006-03-22 08:13 AM


If love is this life’s greatest hit
I guess I’m a lousy shot
but maybe my arrows are weighted
with layers and layers of fear
laid over the cracks of heartbreak
experienced over the years.

ahhh huh, I hear ya hun...and share the same feelings


that speaks of dastardly deeds.

Have just been going thru this of late, can't sleep, angry, afraid, as the memories return....and so life like to...

Helen, your a great lady...this poem was excellent, and should be published...enjoyed very very much

and in this time alone, I've learned, I don't need a man in my life to be fulfilled, happy, successful, content...not at the cost of my identity, and I really really wish, our society would teach it's young girls this, and throw away those darn romance books...

curiouse
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11 posted 2006-03-22 08:21 AM


hey, your poem was such an inspiration and wonderfull to read. i think i feel the same way yet you put into words. Beautifull words
"Yeah, sure, it’s perceived as a grand rebirth
but at the end of the day … I’m saved
from shooting myself in the feet
with those damn useless arrows of fear!"
i loved this
great stuff honey bunch

faiza

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12 posted 2006-03-22 09:30 AM


Helen, continue to fill yourself up with love for others ~ but most importantly, love YOURSELF! ~ There then will be no room left for fear!

Loving one's self enables us to love others even more!

Love you!
Linda


Honeybunch
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13 posted 2006-03-22 12:13 PM


LeeJ, curiouse, and Linda.  Thank you so much for your comments.  We just never stop learning about life and ourselves - oh, for those who take the time, of course.  And we all have to learn different things at different times or indeed in different lifetimes.
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