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cody 2 Junior Member
since 2006-03-12
Posts 48london |
The post remains unopened She's crying in the chair The sun wont shine for her today There's no one left to care, She gave up on life so long ago She can't remember why There must have been a reason once To sit alone and cry, It could have been the new born She cradled to her breast Until one night it breathed no more And then was laid to rest, May be it was her hearts love Before the war snatched him away And only having pictures Of where he died that day, The vigil kept for his return Had lasted many years But in the end the light went out And hope became her tears, She makes herself a cup of tea To sit in her box of gloom With no faith left in this life There's no life in the darkened room. |
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FaBeLy New Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 7Querètaro, Mèxico |
It`s a sad love story... just a sincere heart can write it. I don`t like stories with no happiest endings, may be I identify me with thems... |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Quite perfectly written, the honesty, the bravery of the words, the sheer almost detatched way they were presented, like it was a numbing feeling told in monotone word of mouth..enjoyed..great write and very well rymed too..thank you..welcome to PIP..look forward to reading your words again soon.. Goldenrose. Desire for nothing except desirelessness,hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes, want nothing and you will have everything.avatar Meher Baba. |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I like this one alot -Juju -<>-~-<>-~-<>- |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
"The vigil kept for his return Had lasted many years But in the end the light went out And hope became her tears," Sad write and I think many can relate to the above. Welcome to Pip! Helen |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Well written Cody2, theres always a light shining somewhere if only we can find the strength to raise our heads to see it. Sometimes we need a little help! :-) |
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cody 2 Junior Member
since 2006-03-12
Posts 48london |
i dont know if this is the correct way to repy, i keep flicking back to see how you all do it, so i hope this reaches you all. i thank you all so much for your comments and your warm welcome, now i wont be so nervous when i send another, thank you all |
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cody 2 Junior Member
since 2006-03-12
Posts 48london |
I dont know where my last reply went, but i cannot see it so trying again. thank you all so much for your comments, it was good of you to help my fears of first post, yes goldenrose it was detatched as watching her through a window, i never thought of it like that. |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
Warm welcome! Your lines made the picture so real. It's sad, but so realistic. I enjoyed it. Rae |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
cody 2, Wonderful first post. Welcome |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"She makes herself a cup of tea To sit in her box of gloom With no faith left in this life There's no life in the darkened room" So heartrending... perfectly written. Welcome cody! |
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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
this is one of the best poems i have read. it is fantastic because it has mening. thanx faiza |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
You had me watching through the window with you. Emotions so deeply stirred that mind was unable to see beyond the agony. Drawn in, engulfed, overwhelmed. Helpless but to...feel. Excellent ! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Welcome Cody... to feel is to live even when life becomes so difficult sometime...this made me feel like I was right there with you...excellent write. |
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cody 2 Junior Member
since 2006-03-12
Posts 48london |
you are all so kind, I thankyou for your welcome and comments |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Cody~ Welcome to PiP  what a wonderful first post - this was so very sad and very visual - well penned. ~hugs~  Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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