»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #37
»
They Once were Mine
| Open Poetry #37 |
|
They Once were Mine |
|
|
Gunslinger Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 901TX, USA 
|
I’ve been a lot of miles down this old highway- Like the dreamer who keeps seeking pots of gold. For years I guess I had to have things my way. Alas, I realize I’m growing old. I rode my share of broncs when I was younger. Before the aches and pains set in to stay. I limp today, and is it any wonder- My hair is turning loose and turning gray? There was a time when I was lean and lanky, But middle age has brought a sad decline. The shadow that I cast is so much wider, I often have to ask, "Is that thing mine?" I used to think that I would live forever... My younger brother also felt the same. And all I have to mark the boy’s existence- Is the cold, gray, granite stone that bears his name. My baby boy is almost big as I am... The children that I raised now raise their own. The years all seem to pass so much more quickly- It seems I blink and more of them have gone. You ask me, "What’s the purpose of this missal?" Graffiti etched upon the walls of time... If you should hap upon some fading footprints, I just want the world to know, they once were mine. |
||
| © Copyright 2006 John R. Yaws - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
poettothecars Senior Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 1093New Zealand |
A good poem of interest, which is let down by your choice of words in one line "My hair is turning loose and turning gray?" I feel you should not have used the word 'turning' in the same sentence. It might have been better if the line read as: "My hair is turning loose and going gray?" a poet who cares |
||
|
The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
If you should hap upon some fading footprints, I just want the world to know, they once were mine" Ahhh Gunslinger, this is a work of art and heart. Thank you so much for sharing. |
||
|
Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Hey cowboy! I didn't see you ride back into town. Good to read you again!  ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Trace my body with your words, |
||
|
the grey Member
since 2006-01-06
Posts 119Queensland, Australia. |
G'day John. Read this one over at the Old Rockin' R and enjoyed it as much here. The Grey |
||
Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Gunslinger...Another wonderful story from your experiences. A touch of reality can always be found in your poetry.It's been awhile since reading you. Enjoyed...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
||
|
scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
The wisdom of your words sing true John. Well done. believe in what your heart feels... |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
