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OwlSA
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0 posted 2006-03-14 03:23 PM


FORTY SMEARS
20 November 2000

Shivering and empty,
I watched my sodden thoughts
swish slowly to and fro
across the windscreen of my rain-grey day.
The most saturated slithered to the road below
to an unknown fate of
drowning,
or being squished
or picked up by some colder, wetter and hungrier frame than I.
The rest clung perilously
to my single wiper
with silly expressions
on their pathetic little faces.
New skies and mellow sun  
were banished to myths and legends
of a time long since washed pale and drear,
and the rain rained on
and the rain rained on
and no, Noah didn’t send a helicopter.

- Owl

[This message has been edited by Balladeer (03-21-2006 09:48 PM).]

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XOx Uriah xOX
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1 posted 2006-03-14 03:52 PM


LOL    I REALLY enjoyed this.  I saw, so clearly, the silly pathetic faces.  Wonderful !
Next time the rains come...    Remind yourself that Noah means REST.  Enter into that ark of Rest...and ride above the flood.  No need to steer the vessel.  No rudder is even in the plan.  Just float...and you will reach a higher plane.  ((( OwlSA )))

The Lady
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2 posted 2006-03-14 06:00 PM




It's a wonderful, very telling poem Diana. I hope the sun is shining on you today.

OwlSA
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3 posted 2006-03-17 11:27 PM


Thank you Uriah.  Your response brought me giggles, smiles and comfort.  

Thank you Kate.  Actually although it rained last night and it hasn't made up its mind whether the sun is going to come out today in a slightly cloud-streaked blue sky, or whether it is going to be rainy and grey, but metaphorically the sun is shining (sorta), so my thoughts' little faces are smiling today, albeit with effort.  

Sunshine
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4 posted 2006-03-18 11:06 AM


Smiling at you, Diana.  The sun is always shining...somewhere.  We have been so dry in our neck of the woods, that I'm relishing my gray day.  Hopefully the next few days will remain gray, AND WET, so that we won't worry about crops, and harvest, and all of the things that come with a drought.

But I giggled at the smeary faces...




StevenS
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5 posted 2006-03-18 02:09 PM


Forty lashes with a wet noodle might cheer you a might, stranger things have happened on a cold and dreary night. :-) Doing my rain dance in reverse for ya Owl! Enjoyed!  
StevenS
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6 posted 2006-03-18 02:22 PM


Double posted! I don't know how that happened. :-(
Earth Angel
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7 posted 2006-03-18 04:26 PM


"and the rain rained on
and the rain rained on"

~ The drone and tone of your words had a soporific effect on me.

I enjoy the lull of a gray, dull day once in awhile. It's so grounding ~ and I need that because I have a tendency to float off into the ethers!

"and no, Noah didn’t send a helicopter."

~ I also enjoyed your twist of humour at the end!

Hugs with love,
Linda

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8 posted 2006-03-19 01:47 AM


I know this... and I hope that things are a little sunnier now (hey every little bit counts... or so They tell me)
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